Some schools are now trying to focus on the education of science and technology, so they are reducing the time they spend on teaching students art and music. Do you think it's a good decision for schools to do this?
There is no doubt that science and technology become more and more important in our daily life. From my perspective, it is very wise for schools to make this decision.
First of all, science and technology classes will benefit students’ future career. As we know, our life is nearly surrounded by science and technology. For example, internet helps people get access to everywhere around the world so that we are able to communicate with foreigners and enjoy beautiful scenery just at home. Clearly, new technology and technology are very necessary in daily life, Thus, students are capable of finding relative jobs without effort, if they are really good at science and technology. Accordingly, the schools choose a good option.
Second, knowledge of science and technology will help students do a better job in study. During the classes, students are able to learn how to collect information on the internet, how to do some practice on the ipad and stuff like that. A good case in point is that I used to use an application called Beat to learn English words and grammar after this application was introduced by my teacher. I practiced hard everyday, to my surprise, I made a huge progress in the next test. Therefore, it is good for students to have more science and technology classes than art and music classes.
Finally, the schools need to cost a lot if they spend much time on teaching students art and music. In order to show students vivid music and teach them how to draw a nice painting, the schools have to buy plenty of instruments and painting tools. For instance, in the music class, a teacher may use a piano to play a classical song for students. Moreover, in the art class, a teacher have to give every student brushes and canvases to teach them how to draw water paintings. On the contrary, teaching science and technology does not need a large amount of money because the experiment facilities are not as expensive as instruments and painting tools. Hence decreasing the time of art and music classes is an excellent choice.
As the three reasons mentioned above, it is easy to draw the conclusion that spending less time on teaching music and art can be beneficial for students. In this case, students will get good grades and live a better life in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 413, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...roduced by my teacher. I practiced hard everyday, to my surprise, I made a huge progress...
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Line 9, column 446, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'huge progress'.
Suggestion: huge progress
...d hard everyday, to my surprise, I made a huge progress in the next test. Therefore, it is good...
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Line 13, column 654, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...sive as instruments and painting tools. Hence decreasing the time of art and music cl...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, finally, first, hence, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, no doubt, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1912.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82828282828 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66980225813 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520202020202 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6689070421 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328877355325 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964848190386 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673185472273 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166688706292 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431850958461 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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