Most children fantasize the idea of living alone and the feeling of "independence" seems very fascinating in the developing stages of life. As exciting as this seems, the responsibility of management right from the young age is a pretty daunting task. I feel that living with families can aways be beneficial and I feel this way for several reasons. The coming two paragraphs will explain how the young adults will be benifitted by this.
Firstly, although a large number of kids move out to live an independent life at a very early stage, only a few succeed. This is mainly due to lack of experience. By spending more time with our families, we encounter various other problems faced by adults and the way in which they get through it. For example, young adults usually are nonchalant and do not pay attention to various things that need to be managed every month such as paying bills, grocery shopping, cleaning, etc. When we spend time with our families for a longer time, we get to observe a these being performed by some other famiy member and gives us a sense of realization about the responsibility that is to be needed for living independently. Even if, living alone might inculcate essential qualities such as independency, however, certain experience must be obtained by helping parents with these responsibilities for a certain period of time which will help us gain experience in the activity.
Secondly, living with family is also essential since important qualities such as sharing, bonding, compromising, etc. are developed in the children through them. It is certain that values learnt at childhood are easier to adjust with than when done in adulthood. These qualities are to be definitely needed in some point of life and these cardinal values are imbibed in children only through family. To state an instance, even if the growing kid moves out to stay independently, he might be uncomfortable living with his roommate due to lack of any adjustment being made in his earlier part of life. Without family exposure, the kid might develop into a conservative and aloof kid and these behavioral issues might cause trouble in future.
In conclusion, this has both pros and cons and depends on the individual capabilities and choice of the person. However, I am of the opinion that children must spend as much time as possible with families as it helps gain insight in some aspect or other. It is essential for kids to learn with these life experiences and develop themselves as they grow up.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93882352941 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92116107172 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536470588235 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6087705232 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.473684211 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3684210526 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252276458214 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708325981632 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489771663273 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152520653748 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606052100474 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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