Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a long time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
History of mankind reveals situations wherein children grow under the shade of their parents in all aspects. Whether we talk about humans or animals, they depend on their life giver on many occasions and in the initial stages of development. kids are trained to imitate elders and most probably heed to their decisions. In olden days, people have witnessed everyone living in joint families. But nowadays, with the advent of technology young adults tend to stay away from their families for myriad reasons. Nevertheless, whatever may be the situation, I strongly believe that joint families are better than living independently.
In earlier times, only man went for work and women were confined to the kitchen. however, the trend has changed. Both the parent in a family are working individuals and hence they need their parents to take care of their kids. thus, support is available only in families which live together. For instance, it professionals spend most of their time in offices and come to home late. During those time, to pick the children, to feed them and to help them with their academics, grandparents take the role of parents.
Furthermore, in families having a plethora of members, there is a huge resisting tendency, care, love and sharing. Moral values can be learnt right from childhood and there is a greater opportunity for a person to grow up with a right attitude to perceive things. Research has shown that children from a joint family are usually peace lovers compared to their violent counterparts.
however, independence depends on oneself rather than a group. If anyone wants to be independent, he/she can be provided it does not disturb or upsets others. Being free involves sacrificing those who care for us and wants us to lead a successful life.
thus, to conclude, I sum up the facts that dependence or interdependence rests in the mind rather than soul. Always support from family members triumphs over other things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10802469136 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70169290749 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626543209877 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6731145849 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.75 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309740303215 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759751557903 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657042767497 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139062010489 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0813323835546 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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