Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It goes without saying that our families play an important role in our lives so many young adults would rather live with their family for a longer time. The other side of the coin is that it would be a better idea for children to be independent of their parents as soon as they can. I am of the latter opinion. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost young adults, who learned to be independent at an early time, are capable of taking up responsibilities. No matter how old they are, they all have to move out of our parents’ house sooner or later to go to the university or to start their own families. They will be the one that takes control of their own lives. Moreover, they will have many things to take into consideration like numerous bills to pay. As a result, they must acquire all the skills needed to live on their own and to be responsible for their lives. There is no better way to do that than to be independent since they were young. My own experience is a good example to illustrate this. When I was ten years old, I started to learn to become more self-reliant. I was taught the fundamental skills such as cooking meals or doing the laundry. As a result, I didn’t have a hard time familiarizing myself with the life in university which many of my friends had.
Furthermore, independent young people don’t bother their parents so much and they aren’t considered as the hard burden of their parents. Unfortunately, parents are getting older day by day and their aging results in continual tiredness and occasional sickness. Making them take care of their children only causes them to be more stressful and worn out. Therefore, young adults should let their parents have time to relax and enjoy their lives by being independent of them. For example, my parents, who are aging, tend to be tired now and then so I don’t want them to worry about me too much. Since I went to the university and lead an independent life, my parents have had more time for relaxation together because my dad doesn’t have to take me to school every day and my mom doesn’t need to tidy my room every morning anymore like they used to do. Without me at home, they are able to go on vacations more often and they won’t ever be stressed out because of worrying about me since they know that I can live on my own.
In conclusion, I truly believe that a young adult should live independently of their parents. Independence would teach young people to well-prepare to live alone. In addition, the independent youth don't make their parents worry about them every time.
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'i feel', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.171814671815 0.229887763892 75% => OK
Verbs: 0.181467181467 0.158761421928 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.100386100386 0.0866891130778 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0540540540541 0.046263068375 117% => OK
Pronouns: 0.11583011583 0.0685040099705 169% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.108108108108 0.118717715034 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0328185328185 0.0351676179071 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.58583321908 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0521235521236 0.0309702414327 168% => OK
Particles: 0.00579150579151 0.00188951952338 307% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0617760617761 0.0887237588012 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0212355212355 0.0209618222197 101% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0135135135135 0.0139019557991 97% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2673.0 2387.08602151 112% => OK
No of words: 476.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61554621849 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.256302521008 0.338922669872 76% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.18487394958 0.251872472559 73% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.121848739496 0.174417080927 70% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0861344537815 0.112833075102 76% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58583321908 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504201680672 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 58.5390427957 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8333333333 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6082782049 48.84282405 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.375 120.699889404 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.583333333333 0.644075263715 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 38.3207282913 45.7405998639 84% => OK
Elegance: 0.89010989011 1.45489161554 61% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36929169043 0.300154397459 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103965747371 0.103427244359 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0553141639856 0.0752933317313 73% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.454723188001 0.497263757937 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.115176565597 0.151897553556 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129635793509 0.114077575197 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665181434798 0.0781384742642 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.400102970797 0.336927656856 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0859562426646 0.067059652881 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266865843665 0.210909579961 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205257032874 0.0618886996521 33% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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