The issue states situations in which some young adults’ wants independence from their parents as soon as possible while other prefer to stay with their parents. I believe that not all situations can be analyzed by only looking at the final outcome but we need to start looking at the entire picture. In this case also we cannot say that one of the situations is better and so the person choosing the better situation is smart while the other is not. There might be some reasons behind why the person has chosen that particular situation which we cannot predict. Hence the decision regarding the choosing of the better situation will vary from person to person. Both the situations have pros as well as cons.
Young adults usually think that leaving your parents as soon as possible is the best thing as you will get your freedom. You can do whatever you want there is no one to stop you or no one who will question you. Sometimes getting such a huge amount of freedom is not good because it may lead you to make bad decisions as you have no one to guide you or in other cases you would not listen to anyone. This may spoil your entire career or your life also. Conversely, such decisions may also lead to positive outcomes in some cases. When these young adults have parents who make them feel unwanted or have a bad influence on them, distancing them from their may give them an opportunity to change their lives for better.
On the other hand the situations in which the young adults prefer to live with their parents for a longer time provide the young adults with the support or the care they need in their formative years. These people have parents by their side who can guide them to make appropriate decisions which may help them prosper in life. However, in such cases there are chances that the young adults become too reliable on their parents and cannot make decisions when given the freedom to do so.
In this way we can see that both the situations have positive as well as negative points. So we cannot decide which situation is better in general as it will vary from person to person.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 568, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ular situation which we cannot predict. Hence the decision regarding the choosing of ...
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Line 2, column 697, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...o person. Both the situations have pros as well as cons. Young adults usually think tha...
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Line 4, column 447, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...y spoil your entire career or your life also. Conversely, such decisions may also le...
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Line 8, column 63, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
... that both the situations have positive as well as negative points. So we cannot decide wh...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'conversely', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'regarding', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'in general', 'as well as', 'in some cases', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.18137254902 0.229887763892 79% => OK
Verbs: 0.164215686275 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0882352941176 0.0866891130778 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0710784313725 0.046263068375 154% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0882352941176 0.0685040099705 129% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.117647058824 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0269607843137 0.0351676179071 77% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.22673985036 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Infinitives: 0.031862745098 0.0309702414327 103% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0955882352941 0.0887237588012 108% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.046568627451 0.0209618222197 222% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0294117647059 0.0139019557991 212% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2115.0 2387.08602151 89% => OK
No of words: 381.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55118110236 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.275590551181 0.338922669872 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.186351706037 0.251872472559 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.115485564304 0.174417080927 66% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0656167979003 0.112833075102 58% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22673985036 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45406824147 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.6424044573 59.2087087015 80% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 22.4117647059 20.5533526081 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4595907864 48.84282405 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.411764706 120.699889404 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4117647059 20.5533526081 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.941176470588 0.644075263715 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 41.0469353096 45.7405998639 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.00757575758 1.45489161554 69% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325168216708 0.300154397459 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.149810228665 0.103427244359 145% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.105608598973 0.0752933317313 140% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.52347232702 0.497263757937 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.150508198262 0.151897553556 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121415500808 0.114077575197 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107382849125 0.0781384742642 137% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.22379922285 0.336927656856 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0525051443527 0.067059652881 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20129673651 0.210909579961 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049699684474 0.0618886996521 80% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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