I think young adults wanting independence from their parents as soon as possible is better.
Some people argue that young adults should live with their families for longer time even after they have become matures. Parents will always have the feeling that their child are always small and think that they can't handle themselves and become independent easily. However, i think, they should be allowed to live independently from their parents since they have to learn to live their life and be able to handle every situations of his/her life. I will support my view in two paragraphs.
Firstly, the young adults will learn to be independent. A child will never learn until and unless he is on the real field of the anything. Just by observing and shaking heads and staying in the lap of parents, they wouldn't learn more in their life. For example, i had a friend. She was brought up with so much care and attention and her every activities were helped out by their parents. And during the high school time, she was kept in a hostel. And as she doesn't know how to take care of herself, her everything would be mesh. She didn't know how to iron her dress and even tie her shoe laces. But after some months of staying in hostel, she works were not so meticulous but better than nothing like before. Staying away from parents allowed her to be independent and he was able to do her basics things by herself. Hadn't she stayed in hostel then she would have learned those things and would be depending with her parents still.
Secondly, they will learn to deal with the outside world as they have to go on with their life even after their parent's absence. They get opportunity to explore themselves more and get to know themselves more so that it becomes easier for them to choose the path they want to. For example, a boy wants to become an actor and he can't be an actor staying with their parents at home. He has to learn to be independent with his own so that he could know the hard work he need in order to let his dream come true.
In conclusion,whether to stay with parents for long time or wanting independence from parents has been a complex issue in itself. As every side has pros and cons and there are positive results when the adults are preferring the independent from parents and negative too. However, i stick on to the decision of wanting independence as we have to lead our path on our own and let the dreams come true on our own and off course, we need the blessing, care and attentions of our parents no matter how far and independent we stay.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ld are always small and think that they cant handle themselves and become independen...
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Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...and become independent easily. However, i think, they should be allowed to live i...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...and staying in the lap of parents, they wouldnt learn more in their life. For example, ...
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Line 5, column 263, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... learn more in their life. For example, i had a friend. She was brought up with s...
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Suggestion: didn't
...self, her everything would be mesh. She didnt know how to iron her dress and even tie...
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...om parents allowed her to be independent and he was able to do her basics things ...
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...ble to do her basics things by herself. Hadnt she stayed in hostel then she would hav...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...uld have learned those things and would be depending with her parents still. Secondly, th...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
..., a boy wants to become an actor and he cant be an actor staying with their parents ...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'cants'.
Suggestion: cants
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...that he could know the hard work he need in order to let his dream come true. ...
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Suggestion: , whether
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...from parents and negative too. However, i stick on to the decision of wanting in...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49678800857 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35588277311 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460385438972 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.505128566 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3043478261 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3043478261 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329305104985 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107098317197 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123775602409 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257049882059 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.156005359946 0.0645574589148 242% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.52 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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