Some young adults wants independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specifics reasons and examples to support your opinion
There is much debate about the topic of whether to stay or not with family after a certain age. It is said that most young adults want to live independently from their families. But is this always true? In my opinion, I think that I will prefer to live with my family forever because it is my duty to support my parents when they become elderly since they were with me when I was a child. In this essay, I will address two potential reasons.
For me, independence does not mean that I should start living away from my parents. Today's I am capable enough to go for high studies is just because of my parents. They have helped in my education, look after me when I was sick and motivated me at every step of my career. Take an example from my personal experience. When I was a child, my mother would teach me, look after my homework, and help me to understand mathematics. At that time I was very poor in that subject but today I am an Engineer, doing a job and earning money. Sometimes, I feel so proud of my parent that they have helped me to become a person which I have never dreamed of. For this reason, I believe that I would never think to stay away from my parents.
As I was helped by my parents when I was young. Therefore, It is also my responsibility to take care of them as they age. As people age, their health declines, and they need more attention. In the belief system, a person becomes like a child again when they become old. They need more care and pampering. So, I do not want that my parents feel helpless when they are in need. As they have fulfilled their parent duties, I will also fulfill my responsibility. For Instance, In India, which has a very beautiful culture where every member of the family lives together. In a single house, you can find more than fifteen people ranging from grandchild to grandparent, in some cases, even great grandparent also. This inspires me to always stay together and connected with our family members and help whenever other is in need.
In light of the reason mentioned I strongly believe that I will prefer to stay with my lovely family forever and together.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, i think, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40862944162 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45784500877 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492385786802 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9165423625 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.375 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4166666667 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95833333333 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191805680032 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623982502251 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703338239378 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133815263263 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568833054076 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.0 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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