Some young people have free time in the evenings after school or on days off the school. Which one of the following activities do you think would be most beneficial for young people (14-18 years) to do in their spare time? Why?
- Gaining practical work experience either at a part-time job or by the volunteering in the community
- Learning to play a sport
- Learning to play a musical instrument
Today’s life is full of comfort and spare time, especially for children. The schoolchildren have enough time to accrue new skills and knowledge or take some activities to enjoy and relax in their free time after school. I strongly believe that participating in volunteer work or a part-time job is the best option for kids. I will brief some reasons that validate my opinion.
To begin with, the experience is the most precious nowadays. The person who had some work before his education in the university holds better positions for admission than one who didn't. Why is that? The most important cause is that it shows some skills that are required for being a student; like being responsible for your own decisions and choices, skills of time management that means being able to deal with the school and assignments and work at the same time, and work experience by itself. The other side of the coin is that volunteering programs and part-time jobs help future students to appreciate the significance of their income and save money for school.
Combining work and high school is a reasonable thing to do; it lets people know if the chosen field is the right place for them. They will see the big picture of their future. Doing a particular work is the first step in understanding the whole job, all details of it, all struggles and possible issues that the person might face in the future. So, children will experience their job in real conditions and see if it fits their desires and skills. To make the right decision in their life – to chose their place in our big world, it could be hard when you don’t know how exactly the job you are eager to take looks like, feels like. This is the best way to know for sure if you would like this particular work or not. If you would then you know what skills and knowledge to improve to become an expert in the field.
It is obvious, that the advantage of choosing this way of spending the spare time for children weights more than learning the sport or the music. The work or volunteering programs bring more benefits and perspectives for their future career. It will open a lot of doors in the person’s life because knowing what to do in your life it is much better than just being between fields and wasting valuable time on the search.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...er positions for admission than one who didnt. Why is that? The most important cause ...
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Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...o do; it lets people know if the chosen field is the right place for them. They will...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, so, then, you know, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63902439024 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49291202231 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519512195122 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6342126485 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.105263158 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5789473684 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.63157894737 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307758631655 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903444138624 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564287097422 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188740238685 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466800238386 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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