In our lives, many of us must have witnessed such situations that there is a point when you almost give up then something happens and changes everything into positive. I have got a very matching story to this from my fifteenth birthday.
When I was on my second grade in the high school, my close friends had thought to do something special on my birthday without my knowledge. Eventually, I found out that they wanted to bring me to a rock music concert. However they never knew that I almost hate that kind of rock music which was metal. Metal music has been always too much noise to me. My friends on the other hand literally adore metal music and they are big fans of the band. Just to be kind, of course, I never said anyhting against this idea and accepted to go to the concert. It was a Metallica concert and the tickets were almost from the nearest point to the stage. Despite my reluctance against the band, I did not show any sign of boredom until the moment that changed everything in that concert.
The band were singing their songs one after another and I essentially felt bored since it had never been my kind of music. However the most popular song of the band was going to be sung next, which almost everyone knew at the time. The main vocalist of the band sought a random person to come onto the stage and sing with them. He precisely said "the man in red on the second row" which was definitely nobody else than I. My heart was pounding. I sensed adrenaline mixed up in my blood and streamed through my veins. I virtually had an heart attack. I was on the stage with Metallica and grabbed the microphone next to the band members. After having sung the most popular song of theirs, and getting lots of applause by the audience, I climbed down from the stage and walked back to my spot next to my friends. That was undoubtedly one of the most unforgettable days in my life.
As far as I am concerned, one should never give up on anything before the ending. You can never know what the life is going to present you next. Therefore, it is better to have fun and seize the moment instead of pondering about the past. By this way I believe we may find the happiness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ed to bring me to a rock music concert. However they never knew that I almost hate that...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...nce it had never been my kind of music. However the most popular song of the band was g...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...eamed through my veins. I virtually had an heart attack. I was on the stage with M...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...veins. I virtually had an heart attack. I was on the stage with Metallica and gra...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, kind of, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.38725490196 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32091666621 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544117647059 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8475651238 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.5833333333 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0570418542625 0.236089414692 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0183864616682 0.076458572812 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0285562451474 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0331049136189 0.150856017488 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013571301966 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.89 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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