For success in the future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Some people think that the relation between people and each other’s is the gate way for success. People believe that by improving the relationship between each other they will be able to succeed in their job. Although I understand their pint of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that studying hard in school is the essential way for success. The basis of my opinion is educational, social, and personal.
From the education perspective, people in school will be able to learn more. As the people learn as they become more knowledgeable. People who have more information are those who are more successful in their career. For instance, if you own your own business and you have many relations with people, but unfortunately you are lacking information and knowledge, your business will not proceed well. On the other hand, if someone has his own business and in the meantime, he has been graduated with high degree from college or school, that person can manage his work better. This person will have the ability to manage the business from the financial situation and, he can lead the work in a proper way. Education is the perfect way to continue having successful future job.
Socially, in college and university people can communicate and increase their social network easily. College and university is the perfect place for all students to talk and communicate. For instance, universities will provide the opportunity for all people to get along with each other’s, when students are working on the same project they will have the chance to talk with each other’s, furthermore some professor requested students to do some presentation in front of the class, that allow students to get rid from their stress and shyness. All those challenges that students faced in the university allow them for a better future. Schools, college and universities is the only grantee to have a better relationship with people and consequently provides them with a successful job.
Personally, studying hard is the main way for my success. I graduated from pharmacy school. It is a 5 years program. I used to study hard while I was in the college. I used to go to the library and search all the information and knowledge from the text books. That was hard. I got exhausted and tired while I am doing that work, but by time it becomes like an instinct behavior in me. I learned to be more patient and focus in my work, which allow me to deal good in my work and proceed a successful career.
In conclusion, for the reason I mentioned above, I encourage everyone to study hard in school. Attending schools and college will provide the chance for better success. In Schools and college, we will gain more information that help us being more successful. School and college increase our social network and consequently we will be able to deal with many kinds of people.
- TPO-48 - Integrated Writing Task In recent years, many frog species around the world have declined in numbers or even gone extinct due to changes in their environment. These population declines and extinctions have serious consequences for the ecosystems 80
- integrated tpo 16 78
- same job as your parent or differnt job 70
- TPO INTEGRATED 33 60
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Some people think that the relation betw...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ial situation and, he can lead the work in a proper way. Education is the perfect way to contin...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nue having successful future job. Socially, in college and university peop...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rovides them with a successful job. Personally, studying hard is the main wa...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ork and proceed a successful career. In conclusion, for the reason I mentione...
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Line 10, column 244, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to be' or 'be'.
Suggestion: to be; be
...will gain more information that help us being more successful. School and college in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2399.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89591836735 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75485184049 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436734693878 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 63.6146432039 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.724137931 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8965517241 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41379310345 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320567796642 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956715821351 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798737105735 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18684849953 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520776106682 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.