Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know
how to do well.
The only key for success is working hard. Many people think that doing the same task every day they will reach their goals. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that trying new things and taking risks is the best way for success. The basis of my opinion is financial, social and personal
Form the financial perspective, money and wealth is the most remarkable sign of success. The richest people in the world achieved their wealth by taking risks and trying new things. For instance, Mark Zuckerberg, the founder of the face book, when he was in the university, he faced a dilemma of taking risk of dropping out from college to take the risk on focusing to create the face book. He decided to take a risk and left the university. It ended up with success. It turned out to be worthwhile. He became the richest man in the world. As you can see taking risks lead to success.
Socially, trying different thing help we to feel excited and happy, however, repetitive work make us feel bored and exhausted. If you do the same thing every day, you accomplished nothing. For example, in you work if you do the same task every day, you will get bored. In you school if you taking the same classes all over the years you will be unexcited to continue your education, and so on. On the other hand, when you try to do some changes in you work you will get advanced in your career. Moreover, taking a variety of subjects in school will help you to go further in your education. These illustrate the importance of trying new things.
Personally, taking risk help me to overcome many fears in my life. Many people want to achieve their goals in life, but their fear hinders them from doing what they want. I can recall an example from my life, in order to drive I have to pass two tests, the written one and the driving one. For me the written was so easy, however, I scared from driving on road. That holds me from driving for about two years. My fears from driving kept me and my kids at home all the time. Some times there are emergency cases that I need to drive by my self but I can not. So I decided to face my fear and learn how to drive. I actually did and passed the test. Now I am proud of my self of taking that risk.
In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, I encouraged every one to take risk and try new thing. It’s worthwhile to move on in you life and move one. Taking risk is adding spices to our lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 332, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pinion is financial, social and personal Form the financial perspective, money...
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Line 3, column 545, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...He became the richest man in the world. As you can see taking risks lead to succes...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...u can see taking risks lead to success. Socially, trying different thing help we...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36637931034 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28306315684 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480603448276 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8234057746 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.3125 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269594135761 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738292412178 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751635625345 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164037577237 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656150199325 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.4 11.7677419355 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 58.1214874552 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.47 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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