Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
In modern era, the huge business men and foreign investor expanding their business through out the world. The human being never satisfied with their success and they always found the new tactic for gain the profit. From my vantage point, I certainly agree that successful people endeavor new thing and take risks rather than doing what they know about it because of they want to expand their business, getting the myriad experience and knowledge and increase the social network with foreign countries.
To begin with, successful people never stick to one business. They always think different approaches and find new ways for expand their business. Let take current example of Dhiru Ambani, he is owner of reliance company and successful business men in India. Although he is gain the huge money from his business, he started the Jio sim card through out the India. He take risk and provide six month free calling and 4G internet to public. This plan cause the he get the abaudance loss but he thought the long term profit.
Furthermore, successful people not always take risk for earning money but they take risk for get the knowledge and experience about the new things. For instance, my uncle is large jeans factory owner. He is belonging to affluent family. One day he said the his father that he wants to start the t-sirt and other kinds of girls cloths. he take the risk and in starting the days, he not get the profit but few month after he aware the trendy attires. After he manufacturing the both girls and boys cloths and get the huge profit.
In conclusion,contemplating aforementioned reasons, successful not stick their own knowledge but they take risk and starting a new think because of they wants to up to date with world and survive in the complex world economy. They not only get the knowledge and experience but also receive huge money and expand the business.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84829721362 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5531379807 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495356037152 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9500945857 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1176470588 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245485602794 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755976404748 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0973516384581 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164414157584 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770706978836 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.