For this task, you will write an essay in response to a question that asks you to state, explain, and support your opinion on an issue. Typically, an effective essay will contain a minimum of 300 words. The quality of your writing includes the development of your ideas, the organization of your essay, and the quality and accuracy of the language you use to express your ideas. You have 30 minutes to plan and complete your essay.
Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Judgement in the young age can be deceitful. Allowing young children to avail smart phone, which has internet access, can distract them from the right path. Hence, I agree that parents should forbid young children from owning smart phones.
Reason behind my opinion is young age is delicate and play a significant role in shaping our personality, career and the way we perceive everything. I feel letting youths to own a smart phone can add distractions and digress them from doing well in their life. Apps like Facebook, Whatapp can eat up lot of their time in which they could have involved in physical activities, learning and other useful aspects of life. Additionally, with the help of internet, they can have access to many irrelevant and vulgar sites which can degrade their thought and character. Now we see more than average number of children below 15 years having an account in social media like Facebook, uploading pictures, adding friends whom they don't know. Parents hardly have control over whom their children add as friend or not in social media, so that they can protect them from any bad influences.
Adding to the previous paragraph, apart from social media and vulgar sites, they can have many video games in their phone. We can see even small children of age 5 or 6 playing video games in the smart phones of their parent. This not only leads to addiction among the youth, but also can cause several health impacts. In the current era, we can see so many youths wearing spectacles once they reach the high school, which was rare before. Along with eye problems, sitting at home and playing video games all the time can also lead to obesity. This is because they will not longer involve in physical activities.
Thus, I feel forbidding young children from having their own cell phone can shape their future in the right way, as doing so will preclude bad influences and save a lot of their time for doing something useful for their development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 722, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ding pictures, adding friends whom they dont know. Parents hardly have control over ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, thus, well, apart from, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80882352941 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33361734142 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561764705882 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0010446821 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.1875 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0321988116792 0.236089414692 14% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0131866704438 0.076458572812 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0236262496472 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0223686633468 0.150856017488 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0152964171302 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.