technology has made creative children less than past
as people regard technonogy as essential part of their life more and more, which can help to people cope their problem/s with. some people hold the view that technological progress trait lazy children with low intellectual abilities, while other have different opinion. they imply thechnology make children more active and innovative now than even before. as far as I am concernd, the former point carries more wieght beacause at a same time a so much promising step in to the world of opportunities are confront with children and accompained by will and desire for destinction. I illustrate my reasons as follow:
the first reason should be stated here is that technology could help to children and even adult become more active and innovative and improve their intellectual abilities, emotional growth and even general attitude. with the potential leapt of the advancement in technology in the recent years, the massive amount of information can be essaily and instantaneously obtained through the internet, books and newspaper. the quality and quantity of the technology indicate the level of country. therefore, if one country wants to achieve a better recognition in the world, it must enrich people's and especially children mind with modern technology to make them feel more informed and fullfill their knowledge in order to both overcoming difficulties and becoming seccess in that scientific branch.
another subtle point which deserves some word is that our life has gone through a great changes, since technology and new modern gadgets came into being. these developments provides a totally new and different way to social dissonance in the certain topic such as atrificial intelligence used in cell phone. a small example may given some light to this topic, nowadays children using the samrt phone and tablet with specific apps for hacking down the wifi password, important sites etc. nevertheless, children become more creative and genius, but in opposite way, which not only has negetive effect on their future life but also will infect them to even pessimistic life. I cannot oversee the fact, deal with the negetive aspect as our understanding these problems can instigate us to seek suitable solution.
in conclusion, although there are negetive aspects in improved technology for all people in the world notably children as mentioned above,there are more advantages in this statement. so we as parents, teachers, and older friends must take care about children that using this advanced technology in proper situations.
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- TOEFL TPO 42 - Integrated Writing Task 81
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32009925558 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81267232627 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610421836228 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.1165113276 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.933333333 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8666666667 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171852894877 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607325617587 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389080246501 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109705608742 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219359118223 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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