television and movies have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behaviors, do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the concept of the television’s effect on young people has been brought to public attention. Some people believe that television has a bad impact on kids; however, there is a substantial body of evidence that casts doubt in this belief. From a personal perspective, the former point of view carries more weight, given that television can affect children’s health, behaviors, and grades in negative way. Below I will strive my supporting points in more detail.
The first and foremost point, since television has a variety of violence movies and terrifying media, which are not suitable for kids; to that end, they could negatively affect their behaviors. A recent survey that conducted by the American Academy of pediatrics found that watching media violence can contribute in aggressive behaviors, desensitization to violence, nightmares, and fear of being harmed. Moreover, children grew up watching TV every day are more likely to commit acts of violence than those who watched less. In addition to that, watching violence media not only can affect willingness to help other in need, but also, empathy toward others. Consequently, TV ha a bad effect on kids’ behaviors.
Next, coupled with bad behaviors, low grade is another drawback of TV watching. For instance, developed countries, such as Canada, and The United States has media technology that offers more ways to access TV content, such as on the internet, cell phones and iPods; which leads to an increase in time spend viewing TV. Provided that children spend long time in front of TV, it could negatively affect their brain function and performance in schools. Furthermore, TV can discourage children to read. Given that reading requires much more thinking than television, it fosters young people’s healthy brain. Therefore, television has bad influence on children’s mental well-being.
Ultimately, even though so many voices claim that TV can be entertaining, educational, and can open up a new world for kids to gain exposure to ideas they may never encounter in their own community, I think that TV drawbacks are outweigh its benefits. Television can contribute in sleep problem, and obesity, A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above is, plenty of junk food companies such as McDonalds, Burger King ,and Pizza Hut target kids in their advertisements on TV, which has a direct impact on children’s nutritional intake. Provided that children routinely exposed to certain types of foods, it will add onto children’s weight and could eventually lead to obesity. In addition to that, television increases sedentary lifestyle, given that spending time watching TV can take time away from healthy activity, such as participating in sports, music, arts or other activities that require practice to become skillful. As a result, television has significant drawbacks on children’s health.
Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt, television and movies have more negative effect than positive effects on young people’s behaviors. It is suggested that parents limit kids’ screen time to 1-2 hours daily.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2678.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42105263158 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06364330096 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580971659919 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 807.3 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0310424357 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.727272727 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4545454545 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228006756584 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783580273373 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116477946237 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179998058331 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131977284296 0.0645574589148 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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