TOEFL. Independent writing. Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big
city
The place of residence has a lasting impact on all spheres of your life. It may determine your career advancement, opportunities for education, the level of comfort—all life prospects, in general. Therefore, some people, selecting the place to live, may opt for choosing big cities. Others would prefer more serene areas such as small towns. If I were asked to choose where to live—either in a small town or in a big city, I would choose a big city without any doubts. There are several reasons that explain my preference.
First, big cities provide more opportunities to find a job you dream about. It is not a secret that most of the big, famous, and well-developed companies are concentrated in the centers of big cities. For instance, if you walk in the center of Moscow, the capital of Russian Federation, you will see huge offices of IBM, Google, Shell—all those companies the majority of people desire to work for. These companies have thousands of employees, hundreds of different jobs, and as such a lot of vacancies. They have different positions for managers, experienced specialists, and students. Besides, small companies cannot offer you as big selection of jobs as big companies can. Whether we like it or not, the majority of big companies do not do business in small towns. Consequently, if you are willing to get a good job, there are more chances to get it a big city.
Second, a social life, which is very important nowadays, is way more active in big cities. By “social life” I mean attending different social or business events and forums, and visiting galleries or museums. To be socially active is very important for your professional and personal development. Big cities can offer you thousands of different social activities. Every single person can find something she or he likes and become a part of different communities. For instance, last month I attended SAP forum in Moscow. Many SAP professionals from different businesses gathered to discuss new technologies on the market. I had made a lot of new business contacts, so when I started my new project, I already knew companies with which I can work. There is no surprise that my project went well, because I was working with the best people in the industry. As you can see, active social life is one of the most important parts of your business. This is where big cities easily outdo small towns by offering you a lot of opportunities to enhance yourself socially.
To sum up, if you are an active person, if you have big career goals, and if you have a lot of hobbies, then big cities are for you. If you wonder where the best universities and most famous galleries are located or where the biggest events take place, the answer is – in the big cities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...os; I mean attending different social or business events and forums, and visiting...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for instance', 'i mean', 'in general', 'such as', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230347349177 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.135283363803 0.158761421928 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.126142595978 0.0866891130778 146% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0292504570384 0.046263068375 63% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0694698354662 0.0685040099705 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.120658135283 0.118717715034 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0201096892139 0.0351676179071 57% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84793607446 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0201096892139 0.0309702414327 65% => OK
Particles: 0.0018281535649 0.00188951952338 97% => OK
Determiners: 0.073126142596 0.0887237588012 82% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0201096892139 0.0209618222197 96% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0146252285192 0.0139019557991 105% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2766.0 2387.08602151 116% => OK
No of words: 476.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81092436975 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.34243697479 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.256302521008 0.251872472559 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.178571428571 0.174417080927 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.136554621849 0.112833075102 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84793607446 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510504201681 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 59.5655908797 59.2087087015 101% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6684587814 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.6296296296 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8914052433 48.84282405 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.444444444 120.699889404 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6296296296 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.555555555556 0.644075263715 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 43.2598817305 45.7405998639 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.5859375 1.45489161554 109% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1599886599 0.300154397459 53% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0987272123673 0.103427244359 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0702710588616 0.0752933317313 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.398353969176 0.497263757937 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14987924707 0.151897553556 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546786661149 0.114077575197 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632559414141 0.0781384742642 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.354308004582 0.336927656856 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0498217945102 0.067059652881 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125084809337 0.210909579961 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0952734639439 0.0618886996521 154% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.91756272401 244% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 12.0 2.75985663082 435% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 27.0 13.6433691756 198% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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