考满分 toeflTPO-02 Independent Writing
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Directions: You have 30 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically an effective response will be 300 words at least.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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There are different definitions to the word '' Relationship'' in our life. there is marital relationship, family relationship, and friendship. But all the definitions have to have the truth element in it or it won't be complete. Although, a lot of people see that sometimes small lie my be helpful in some situations, but I have different opinion. I believe that always saying the truth is the best solution due to the reasons I will discuss right now.
First, saying the truth helps you from getting problems. Yon know when sometimes at work you have something broken while you were working on it, and you being afraid and try to hide or get rid off it and not take responsibility for. As a result when your lead found that it getting worse, because you did not tell him the truth so he won't trust you any more, in addition the mistake you did it was fixable, if you told him from the beginning that's might help you and fix it immediately without any problem. In another way, you can always be in the safe side when you are telling the truth no matter what is the results.
Second, in the relationships between a couple whatever engaged or married, saying the truth is the right way to get a happy and perfect life. For instance, me and my husband always try to be true to each other in everything. Even though sometimes it's so difficult to say it but we have to say it, in order to get the life we want and we planned to since we where a couple. personally, I see that if I tell him the truth from the beginning I save a lot of time of arguing If he discovers the truth later, I will withstand the results of my faults from the first second rather than make him upset and not talking with me for a while or even leave me depending on the size of the lie.
Admittedly, it may be true that sometimes saying the ''white lies'' are fine to tell, because it save you from a lot misunderstanding or big problems. Sometimes it is useful to keep someone feelings from getting hurt due to saying the truth, like when you try to hide your illness so they will not feel worry about you or when someone hide their feeling towards love ones because the other one is in love with other person. However , I still recommend saying the truth all the times in order to save yourself from having bad situation if you don't.
In conclusion, for all the reason stated above, I encourage people to try saying the truth in their daily life, in work, with friends and family. If they do so they will see the difference themselves and they will be so glad they did!
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Comments
If I work on these
If I work on these grammatical mistakes, do you think I can get 24 ?
and can you please help with that?
Thanks
Your main problems are not
Your main problems are not grammatical issues. They are not serious. You will need to develop better sentences. for example, use passive voice.
Check and read articles online about advanced essay writing.
Although, a lot of people see that sometimes small lie my be helpful in some situations, but I have....
Description: don't put 'although' 'but' in one sentence.
Sentence: Yon know when sometimes at work you have something broken while you were working on it, and you being afraid and try to hide or get rid off it and not take responsibility for.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb 'to be', present participle or gerund
Suggestion: Refer to you and being
Sentence: If they do so they will see the difference themselves and they will be so glad they did
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by a pronoun, plural, reflexive
Suggestion: Refer to difference and themselves
flaws:
More sentences varieties wanted. Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence. Look:
Yon know when sometimes at work
you have something broken while
you were working on it, and
you being afraid and try to hide or get rid off it and not take responsibility for.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 478 350
No. of Characters: 2018 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.676 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.222 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.365 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.118 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.739 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.584 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.216 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5