Financial allocation is known as an important issue in the policy of universities and colleges pursuing to provide the best conditions for their students. Nowadays, social activities and educational facilities are the two main factors that are supposed to be financed. In my opinion, the economic condition of universities determines whether or not social activities are as important as educational facilities.
First, in modern societies, it is generally accepted that social activities like sports and music groups are as important as other factors like the library facilities. A large amount of expenditure including financial supports like endowment provided by industrial companies or non-profit organizations makes it possible for universities to support students in different aspects of life. The MIT University, for instance, salary, receives more than 14 billion dollars endowment and thus it is capable to provide suitable conditions for competition between students in both educational issues and social activities. The statistics indicate students studying in such good conditions are more successful in their business after graduation.
Second, the lack of financial support or poverty in a more harsh condition is a contributing factor in limitation of developing and advances of universities. Universities and colleges located in developing countries like Iraq in the Middle East, always have to make a hard decision in allocating their limited finance to a wide range of requirement of students. In these harsh condition, the familiar policy is to spend expenditure on educational facilities like hiring professors and building laboratories and libraries. As you can see, the economic status, especially the amount of finance plays a crucial role in the policy of universities and colleges no matter how much social activities are important for students.
In conclusion, unlike some people, who may insist on finding a concrete answer to the question whether educational institutions should support social activities as much as educational facilities, it is my deep conviction that the answer depends upon the economic conditions of institutions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 335, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ic condition of universities determines whether or not social activities are as important as e...
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Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
... insist on finding a concrete answer to the question whether educational institutions should support...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72445820433 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22308716722 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.51630824373 125% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.2044257996 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.083333333 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9166666667 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154614618111 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061392376922 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402076226504 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985397201827 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248352357227 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.71 58.1214874552 34% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 10.1575268817 167% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 10.9000537634 149% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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