Views differ considerably when it comes to the issue whether university allocate the same amount of money to sports and social activities as they do for academic purposes. Some people contends that spending money on sports is wasting of money since they consider sports are a tool of distracting to students. However, as far as I am concerning, I strongly believe that sports and social activities are just as important as libraries and classes funds. There are many benefits for sports and social activities for students such as helping them to stay healthy both physically and mentally, gaining social communication in the long run.
The first exquisite reason is that sports can help students to stay healthy both physically and mentally. college is not only place for students to expand their minds, but also a place to build their body. It is essential and even mandatory for students to participate in any kind of sport like soccer or basketball to stay in a good shape. In addition to that, sports are a good source to decrease stress and relieve tension since students in school under too much stress due to too much study. According to recent research, it is scientifically proven that students who are taking part in sports are much more healthier and less likely to develop psychological disorder. For example, when i was in school , i participated in soccer team, I was able to lose more than ten pounds. moreover, I was successful because of less stressed out.
Another reason that deserve more words is that social activities are very essential in developing social communication . Students can learn many skills from participating in social activities as they can learn how to be sociable, how to be co-operative.These skills can help them in their future career.FOr example, I remember when I was in college, I was amember in student union, i was able to raise money for many organization and deal with many people around from differnt walks of life. AS a resulut, I was a very successful in my job due to these skills that i aquired when I was in college.
Admittedly, funding classes and libraries are important for student education as they can keep up with the most recent technology such as using power point in classes or use developed computers in the library to do their researches.But, the advantages of funding sports and social activities far outweigh the advatagesof funding libraries and classes.
To put it in a nutshell, it is crucial to fund the sports and social activites as academics purposes not only because it help students to stay healthy, but also to develop communication skills fo a better future.
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Essay evaluation report
college is not only place for students
college is not only the place for students
FOr example, I remember when I was in college, I was amember in student union, i was able to raise money for many organization and deal with many people around from differnt walks of life.
For example, I remember when I was in college, I was a member in student union, and i was able to raise money for many organization to deal with many people around from different walks of life.
wrong:
sentence A, sentence B
correct:
sentence A, and(or while, but...) sentence B
not only because it help students to stay healthy, but also to develop communication skills fo a better future.
because it not only helps students to stay healthy, but also develops communication skills for a better future.//parallel
Sentence: Students can learn many skills from participating in social activities as they can learn how to be sociable, how to be co-operative.These skills can help them in their future career.FOr example, I remember when I was in college, I was amember in student union, i was able to raise money for many organization and deal with many people around from differnt walks of life.
Error: differnt Suggestion: different
Error: amember Suggestion: member
Sentence: AS a resulut, I was a very successful in my job due to these skills that i aquired when I was in college.
Error: resulut Suggestion: result
Error: aquired Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Admittedly, funding classes and libraries are important for student education as they can keep up with the most recent technology such as using power point in classes or use developed computers in the library to do their researches.But, the advantages of funding sports and social activities far outweigh the advatagesof funding libraries and classes.
Error: advatagesof Suggestion: advantages
Sentence: To put it in a nutshell, it is crucial to fund the sports and social activites as academics purposes not only because it help students to stay healthy, but also to develop communication skills fo a better future.
Error: activites Suggestion: activities
Error: fo Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 449 350
No. of Characters: 2150 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.603 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.788 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.72 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.837 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.625 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.152 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Views differ considerably when it comes ...
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Line 1, column 337, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...cting to students. However, as far as I am concerning, I strongly believe that sports and soc...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ocial communication in the long run. The first exquisite reason is that sport...
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Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: College
...y healthy both physically and mentally. college is not only place for students to expan...
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Line 3, column 612, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
... who are taking part in sports are much more healthier and less likely to develop psychologica...
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Line 3, column 696, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ychological disorder. For example, when i was in school , i participated in socce...
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Line 3, column 711, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...order. For example, when i was in school , i participated in soccer team, I was ab...
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Line 3, column 714, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...er. For example, when i was in school , i participated in soccer team, I was able...
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Line 3, column 786, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
... was able to lose more than ten pounds. moreover, I was successful because of less stres...
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Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ntial in developing social communication . Students can learn many skills from par...
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Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: These
... to be sociable, how to be co-operative.These skills can help them in their future ca...
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Line 5, column 383, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ollege, I was amember in student union, i was able to raise money for many organi...
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Line 5, column 413, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun organization seems to be countable; consider using: 'many organizations'.
Suggestion: many organizations
...nt union, i was able to raise money for many organization and deal with many people around from d...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat i aquired when I was in college. Admittedly, funding classes and librarie...
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Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...s in the library to do their researches.But, the advantages of funding sports and s...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sof funding libraries and classes. To put it in a nutshell, it is crucial t...
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Line 10, column 124, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
... academics purposes not only because it help students to stay healthy, but also to d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, for example, in addition, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2206.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94618834081 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87615050183 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466367713004 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.1147550078 48.9658058833 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.875 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.875 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140950418069 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537887056847 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600461556413 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927794704565 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660691465044 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.