TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When a child is born, she always looks for another child’s voice and reacts to it, and because of this character, the children looking for being friend with someone who has the same behavioral characteristics. so they will be good friends, and that is starting of their friendships, they spend most of the time together and they’re talking about everything without any secrets, they take risks and do exciting things together. they also, can be together for along times. and it depends on their life but they're going to travel and get full of new stranger experiments. So save that old friend is normal way of keeping stable friendships they have.in my opinion, the old friendships are the part of their hearts. addition to, some of the old friends can be more than a simple friends, and they will become partners of life after the periods of time.

First, sometimes the conjunction of friendships is very strong and nobody can brock it, the same as their family, for example, I had a friend her name was Jila we were as the best friend for 13 years and she was closer to me than my sister, unfortunately I lost her in an accident and after I’m feeling that lose my soul, I mean I lost myself because she was my everything that I’ve ever had, after she left us I’ve never find someone like her.

Second, the new friends couldn’t trust-able and it takes a long time to they know each other. Nowadays most of the people wear a mask and they’ve never show their real features and most of the time they just showoff what they are, and it’s really awful and terrible to meet a new people, for example, after I lost my friend in accident I’m looking for a new friend but I couldn’t because most of them used to say lie. So I couldn’t find that a girl who kind to me like as her.

In conclusion, people should keep in touche to their friends, because it’s valuable as a gold, and they can be continuing it even they get old and have fun together. I hope all the people spend their time with their reliable friend that have match behavior with each other and have enjoyable time together on all bad and good situations they’ll have. because being a good friend, along with life problems, makes it easier to tolerate situations.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ks and do exciting things together. they also, can be together for along times. ...
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...times. and it depends on their life but theyre going to travel and get full of new str...
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...ners of life after the periods of time. First, sometimes the conjunction of frie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, so, for example, i mean, in conclusion, talking about, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66925064599 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63542583962 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50645994832 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.108744431 48.9658058833 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 150.583333333 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.25 20.6045352989 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0847702671312 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403193753202 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316087881703 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.055217574023 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247791987512 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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