TPO-04 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

According to the increasing rate at which technology is changing and influencing ours lives, it further predicts that sooner there will come a time when we will see our lives as we have seen in futuristic films. Books are being replaced by tablets, mails have transformed into emails, cash being changed into cards, reward points or bitcoins. We can further expect to see our cars being transformed into floating pads for us to travel long distances to avoid traffic.

Since 10 years we have seen cars being modified to a greater extend. First they had manual function, now they are automatic. Most of today's generation does not even know how to drive a manual car because they are rarely seen. Now the most recent technology in cars is called 'autopilot'. It is just like our airplanes that once plane is in the air the pilot puts it on auto pilot and the planes fly itself at a constant speed. Similar practice is being followed in the most recent Mercedes that once the path is put in the GPS then the driver puts his car on auto pilot mode and the car drives itself. It uses the sensors around the car to check for pedestrians and surrounding traffic and adjusts the speed accordingly. This technology is being further studied to completely replace cars into individual flying pads. They are like backpacks that an individual wears and uses it to fly. Almost 2 years ago, this technology was tested in New York city where 2 individuals flew around buildings for a while. However, it is still under research.

Because of the increasing number of population, we are experiencing an increase in the number of cars and other forms of transportation. And this results in an increase in the demand for more roads and bridges that results in deforestation which could be harmful for our environment. Also, this increase in traffic is causing congestion in cities as well as in residential areas. This increase in number of cars is another reason why people experience traffic on the roads and tend to avoid them by travelling in trains. For example, when I go to the university, it takes me an hour and a half to drive. However, if I use a train it just take 40 minutes. And because of this I travel by train most of the time. Also, if I take my car then I need to find parking space, that is full of hassle and another reason why people do not want to use cars anymore.

Similarly, people who work in the cities also prefer to use subways and trains on daily basis to travel because of the traffic on the roads and this will soon result in no cars being wanted. Also, the research on flying pads may get effective in 20 years. Along with the increasing use of trains and buses people will soon completely eliminate the use of cars thus making them obsolete.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...vel long distances to avoid traffic. Since 10 years we have seen cars being modifi...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the todays') or simply say ''Most todays''.
Suggestion: Most of the todays; Most todays
...anual function, now they are automatic. Most of todays generation does not even know how to dr...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, however, if, may, similarly, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for example, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58585858586 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51625386577 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494949494949 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2632124357 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.56 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148766534617 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421395800341 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367987076945 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093385093822 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200531480537 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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