TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

Technology and entertainment devices has attracted the humans to their fields, which decreased their productivity and wasted their time in using them. I strongly a greed on the statement that said, People today wasting most of their time on their enjoyment not on achieving their dreams. Every thing in our life has its own good and bad things, balance between having fun and working for achieving or goals in life.

First of all, In the ancient ages people were spending their time on looking for a ways to understand and discover the world around them and make the life easier. There were a progress in the human life: every man were working on something to make it better such as agriculture by trying different ways of planting in order to have a good crops different kind of seeds to have a variety of vegetable and fruit kinds. their plenty of unsolved problems in our world such as poverty, education, disease, ignorance, ... etc. If their is people concerning to that problems we were living in a better world; but, people became selfish only caring about their enjoyments. only a few of people, working to solve such a problems that is why there is no any human progress in our world.

Second of all, the Social media and Entertainment programs are the most time consuming ways used by humans nowadays.
The social media such as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter ,..., etc. Especially, the first one, were adolescents spending time on it by publishing posts, pictures of their owns, talking about every ting in their lives and following the celebrities news, more than spending time on doing their homework and the schools activity. For instant, you might find the whole family members chating on Facebook about a serious problem affecting their life rather than a personal talk. As a result of that their is a lake of contact between the parents and their own children; which, is one of the most common social problems.

The TV-series and entertainment programs, are another example, of the human time consuming ways, by watching it and talking about it. Sometimes, students could spend a myriad amount of time talking about one of the most famous movies, series or might be the members of it. Furthermore, on YouTube, you can find video has achieved around two billion views or more, just because it was a funny one. In addition to, playing games such as play-station which is widely used by the younger and elder people.

In conclusion, the human progress won't be achieved by wasting most of our times only on having fun rather than spending it on achieving our own goals or solving the one of the world affecting problems. Moreover, full time working is not a good one either, balance in between work and fun is important.

Votes
Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
... and wasted their time in using them. I strongly a greed on the statement that said, Peopl...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 82, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a way' or simply 'ways'?
Suggestion: a way; ways
...were spending their time on looking for a ways to understand and discover the world ar...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'progress'.
Suggestion: progress
...em and make the life easier. There were a progress in the human life: every man were worki...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Their
...a variety of vegetable and fruit kinds. their plenty of unsolved problems in our worl...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 525, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...cation, disease, ignorance, ... etc. If their is people concerning to that problems w...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 666, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Only
...ish only caring about their enjoyments. only a few of people, working to solve such ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 710, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a problem' or simply 'problems'?
Suggestion: a problem; problems
... a few of people, working to solve such a problems that is why there is no any human progr...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 742, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ve such a problems that is why there is no any human progress in our world. Se...
^^
Line 6, column 54, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...dia such as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter ,..., etc. Especially, the first one, wer...
^^
Line 6, column 233, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...y ting in their lives and following the celebrities news, more than spending time on doing ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 307, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...ng time on doing their homework and the schools activity. For instant, you might find t...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 491, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...an a personal talk. As a result of that their is a lake of contact between the parent...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 311, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t. Furthermore, on YouTube, you can find video has achieved around two billion vi...
^^
Line 10, column 213, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...the world affecting problems. Moreover, full time working is not a good one either, balan...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 303, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e in between work and fun is important.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, second, so, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, talking about, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2349.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00852878465 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52325430079 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481876332623 0.524837075471 92% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.778923018 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.631578947 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6842105263 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52631578947 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0932140462113 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0288683309805 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034002332151 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0484576870737 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029963666164 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.