TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The parents of toddlers should know the right way of the growth of their children and parents before permit their child to watch Television should know the unsound effect of television. In my opinion, parents should not allow their children to watch television advertisement before they are mature enough to differentiate between bad and good.
In our modern days' children are already trapped inside smartphones and television shows and their parents are allowing them by knowingly or unknowingly the bad side of the effect of television. The maximum brain growth occurs within the five years of children and gives them something that they don't understand hiders their mental growth. The television and smartphone also hurt their physical growth as they spend their more time with gadgets instead of playing outside. Children learn from their neighborhood. In the early days, a child learns to speak by watching and hearing their parents and they try to imitate them. The child watches the movement of mouth hear the sound of a word and they try to copy that.
When a child goes to school and meets new peoples, that way they learn socializing. A child plays with other children in the outside or in a ground their physical strength improved. Children learn the new things by touching them throwing them. But watching television they don't learn anything, sometimes what they hear to watch on television is not proper for their underdeveloped mind and that could harm them. TOO much time spent on television can harm their eyesight.
Advertising is purely business even it's an endorsement of a child product. Advertisements are done with the intention of business and they want consumers and they want peoples spent their money on some particular product. I am not saying anything about the advertisement is good or bad in overall but sometimes it can harm children. For example, advertisements of useless toy or some food like chocolate that is not good for children. But children didn't the effect of that product and they might be persistent to get the product. Sometimes advertisements are not made for children, sometimes its exploits content can harm children mind.
Now, in our modern day's peoples argue that in spite of all the bad effects of television we cannot deny the usefulness of television. Even school, sometimes use television as an education medium. But I would say that some usefulness cannot justify the dark side of television and it's emerging advertisement industry and in modern days parents should be more careful about the use of television and should know the effects of advertisement on the young mind of their children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...dren and gives them something that they dont understand hiders their mental growth. ...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to socialize'.
Suggestion: to socialize
... meets new peoples, that way they learn socializing. A child plays with other children in ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...wing them. But watching television they dont learn anything, sometimes what they hea...
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Line 6, column 37, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
.... Advertising is purely business even its an endorsement of a child product. Adve...
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Line 6, column 449, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... is not good for children. But children didnt the effect of that product and they mig...
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Line 8, column 281, Rule ID: IT_IS[7]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...justify the dark side of television and its emerging advertisement industry and in ...
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Line 8, column 477, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt on the young mind of their children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, in my opinion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07077625571 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73756478682 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445205479452 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7741873313 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.954545455 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9090909091 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.63636363636 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127890231749 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460586459558 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326294446917 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855697777958 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255545281247 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.