Affecting children deaply, computer games are getting to increase day by day. Children tend to spend their all time with these computer games which lead to waste their time foulish. Families try deal with with this problem, however, computer games are attractant. I completely support that playing computer games is a waste of time that childen should not be permitted to play for several reasons which I will state following sencentes.
To begin with, children can spend their all time, without eating, drinking, just focusing computer screen. Computer games capture them for some way which does not let them to think anything of life activitives such as playing with their friend, trying to find the other activities. For some families, it could be benefit because of controling children behaviour. On the other hand, computer games has a lot of hazarduos for children's improving. Children begin to cope with many problems which are lack of attention, learning difficulty, becoming insensitive what is happing around them, etc. To give an instance is that I have a 12 years brother preparing high school exam. But afterwars school he consumes his time just computer games and he is getting unsuccesfull day by day.
The other reason is why I agree with this idea that sitting on the chair, seeing computer screen hours, lead to gain health problem such as muscle and skeletal disorder. For example, I have recently read about this on newspaper that one ten years guy was playing so much computer games and he had problem with his leg because of blood pressure. Morever, they could have brain damage or some problem with nerves which also impects their social life.
İn conclusion, I utterly belive that computer should be banded or given limited time for children's attitude is a valid argument owing to all these reasons above. There is no doubt that children wants to live dream life but families has responsibilities for their children to control and give good education them. And it is not hard to impect children in a positive way who are learning age.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: with
...e their time foulish. Families try deal with with this problem, however, computer games a...
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Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... why I agree with this idea that sitting on the chair, seeing computer screen hou...
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Line 4, column 351, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
.... And it is not hard to impect children in a positive way who are learning age.
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Line 4, column 386, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to age'
Suggestion: to age
...dren in a positive way who are learning age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, for example, no doubt, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96242774566 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48809689292 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560693641618 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5524403565 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3529411765 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283880119444 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988863210735 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711749421054 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190233839851 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832945852925 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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