Humans are social creature who can no live alone. The big family had always been an essential part of people's lives in old times. I agree that the extended family is less important now than it was in the past. I will explore the reasons for my stance in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, people now are more busy and have many commitments than in the past. Every person in this complex and rapidly changing world has many duties to do besides his work. The supporting and fulfilling the needs of our small families became much difficult than it was in the past because of the high competitive modern world. For example, one can study besides his work at night to enhance his knowledge in his or her work area, in order to be able to get a promotion, higher position, or even new better career. Moreover, parents spend a lot of time in following and monitoring their children study and their overall educational progress. Not to mention, the normal daily basic chores and routine work. With all this burden of duties, it is likely not be able to communicate and socialized with your extended family, because you may not have enough time to meet all these requirements.
What is more, the communication methods have developed dramatically, which enables people to easily contact their relatives through phones or social media and the like. Why would you go to visit a family relative where you can call him or her for two minutes?, you will save a lot of time and energy and maybe focus on more practical things in your life. The virtual world is engulfing our life and giving no chance to behave and interact in person as our grandparents did long time ago. We tend to choose the most comfortable solution. For instance, in old times if a friend is ill, I should pay him a visit, but in these days, people are likely to just give him or her a phone call or send them a some flowers. Generally speaking, more people prone to be less sociable than our ancestors were in the past.
In conclusion, I contends that extended family is less important now than it was in the past due the fact that people now have more commitments, busy schedules, moreover, the modern communications ways made us less sociable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ance to behave and interact in person as our grandparents did long time ago. We t...
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...ould pay him a visit, but in these days, people are likely to just give him or he...
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...moreover, the modern communications ways made us less sociable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62025316456 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53060231669 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564556962025 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8673782956 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.388888889 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9444444444 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212700672057 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719438647324 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102451849969 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154469194156 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644286065432 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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