Nowadays people are traveling a lot, either for work, holiday or seeking a treatment besides other multiple reasons. this can attribute to the noticeable development of the transportation system around the globe. while some people prefer to travel abroad in order to explore a new country, I believe that local traveling is much better for the following reasons.
To begin with, every region of the country has its own culture and traditions. This vast diversity constitutes an important pillar of any nation. also, it contains different landscapes and antiquities from the ancient period. Through visiting these places person can know his country better and that will raise the appreciation sense to his own country. furthermore, the local tourism is actually participating in the flourishing of the economic states of the country. For instance, there is a popular trend in my country recently to increase internal tourism, so, rather than investing the money in another foreign country, one can benefit the financial state of his town and that will lead to positive effects on the population and the community as a whole. For example, since the beginning of this trend, the government made a lot of commercials about different places in the country in order to attract more people, thus, the advertising companies got huge benefits. In addition, they built new hotels and restaurants to accommodate the maximum number of people. Also, they establish new big barks to attract the children. All these changes carried tremendous advantages to local inhabitants in the first place. moreover, international tourists become attracted more to my country and that increase the financial status even more.
Secondly, through local traveling, we can get new friends and build new connections which I find it the most enjoyable part of the traveling in general. This connection can benefit the person later on. For example, five years ago, during my annual holiday, I decided to visit Nile river province which located in the east of Sudan. It was my first time for me, actually, the reason behind this visit that I saw an Australian vlogger who came to Sudan and register a movie about Dender national park it was a really marvelous place. when I arrived there was surprised by the beauty of the area and its amazing natural landscape. Consequently, every year I visit a new place in my country.
In conclusion, Seeing a new country may be more interesting for most of the people, but actually traveling inside the country yield in a lot of benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in general, to begin with, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09546539379 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77750365883 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570405727924 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0158509209 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.666666667 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7619047619 5.45110844103 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132048632489 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363894261358 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397283980288 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884515732853 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337019122653 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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