TPO 15- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Money is very important part of our lives. It is used by all of the people in terms of buying food, clothes, purchasing car and house. Spending huge amount of money gives individuals with power. Some people believe that in order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their money at young age. In my humble opinion, I agree with the statement that young adults must manage their money at their tender age. I feel this way for two main reasons, which i will explore in the following essay.
First of all, parents has the responsibility for their children to know the importance of money. They should instill in their young minds that gaining sense of responsibility for their money will be rewarding. At a young age my mother taught me the great importance of handling my own finances. For example, my mom and I opened a joint bank account its main purpose is for me to track how much money I save in a year. I save all my money from my allowance and money that I receive from doing household chores. As a result, I was eager to save more money so I can buy the material things I want to have and not asking my parents to buy me toys and clothes. I gained independence at that point, just a little gesture of saving up small amount of money taught me that every penny is important and it is difficult to earned money, so it must be used wisely and properly.
Secondly, growing up with the mental knowledge of saving up helps me to become responsible person. Using your hard earned money for important and meaningful things like spending it for your health and insurance is a big leap towards being financially stable individual. Because I was taught by my mother to save up at an early age I still adopted her life lesson up to this day. For instance, I tend to save up for emergency expenses because we don't know when we will needed large amount of money for hospital bills and medical expenditure and it is very expensive to get hospitalized nowadays. Also, I get a plan for life insurance and medical assistance if something happened I can have monetary assistance through my insurances. I believe its better to save up for the future rather than worrying later on. To sum up, having financial stability is vital in every human being because you will not worry if something bad will happened and you must be prepared for anything.
To summarize, I agree that children should know how to manage their money even when they are young. This is because it will prepare them to the future of becoming financially stable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ortant part of our lives. It is used by all of the people in terms of buying food, clothes...
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Line 1, column 486, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...el this way for two main reasons, which i will explore in the following essay. ...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ds being financially stable individual. Because I was taught by my mother to save up at...
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Line 5, column 446, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ve up for emergency expenses because we dont know when we will needed large amount o...
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Line 5, column 469, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'need'
Suggestion: need
...enses because we dont know when we will needed large amount of money for hospital bill...
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Line 5, column 929, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'happen'
Suggestion: happen
...ou will not worry if something bad will happened and you must be prepared for anything. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57952069717 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54777542583 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488017429194 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3508891117 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5454545455 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8636363636 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250342213276 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898921137253 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105820016099 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196981785563 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104013908408 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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