TPO 16- Q2
Travelling plays an essential role in our lives; because it makes human happy and gives a new experience to us that maybe anything will never be able to give this experience through other ways. Some think that traveling with a tour guide is more fun than traveling by yourself. In my view traveling by myself is more useful and enjoyable, and I have reasons for that.
First, going to a trip by yourself provide many more chances to meet new people. When you are your own boss and decide where to go, where to stay; more interesting things will happen. For example, the whole family went to a trip to Shiraz in the south part of Iran. Shiraz is a very warm and humid city which is also very ancient. Many former kings of Iran and Asia lived in that city because of its nature, and its beauty. We went there by our own car, and we met few people who had taken a tour. Whenever they wanted to move to another place or stay where they are, the manager warned them that it is too late, and they are not going to have time to meet new places. Actually, I felt pity for them, and whenever this trip comes to my mind, I tell myself that traveling by ourselves is more fun.
Second, you learn many things from a trip that no one is there to help you, to guide you, to show you the directions, to tell you where to go, and what to eat. Being on your own makes you wiser and more experienced. For instance, I had a trip to Russia by myself. In that trip, after a few days I ran out of money, and did not know what to do; furthermore, I had no place to sleep even. Well, at the first moment I decided that this a gift, that has been sent by god, to use it for raising myself in a strange, and unknown country. Then I knocked the door of some houses, and asked them to give me food; actually, the food was very delicious too. Then I found a work to get a little money, and save enough of it to pay for the ticket of the airplane. Well god helped me by introducing me to a kind person that after working few days for her, she gave me my return money. That travel taught me many things that I will never forget in my life.
So basically that's why I think traveling on your own is much more valuable, and enjoyable; because being your own boss and deciding based on your own desire satisfy you with a lot more. Moreover, the experience that is obtained through this kind of trips, can't be compared to anything else, and I think everyone should try it for one time to understand me that everyone can discover the world better than anyone else.
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Comments
I corrected the spelling
I corrected the spelling issues by Grammarly.
Well, better not to do this
Well, better not to do this way. Try to check out spellings by your own after the writing. You can't use the spell checker in the actual test room.
Yeah, you're right.
Yeah, you're right.
I have a lot of misspelling words.
Essay evaluation report
going to a trip by yourself provide many more chances
going to a trip by yourself provides many more chances
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 490 350
No. of Characters: 1979 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.705 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.039 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.058 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 59 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.273 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.561 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.292 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.449 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Still a lot of pronouns, but
Still a lot of pronouns, but they are less now.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Travelling plays an essential role in ou...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oyable, and I have reasons for that. First, going to a trip by yourself provi...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... traveling by ourselves is more fun. Second, you learn many things from a tri...
^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that I will never forget in my life. So basically thats why I think traveling...
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Line 7, column 18, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
... forget in my life. So basically thats why I think traveling on your own is mu...
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Line 7, column 261, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...is obtained through this kind of trips, cant be compared to anything else, and I thi...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'kind of', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.171220400729 0.229887763892 74% => OK
Verbs: 0.174863387978 0.158761421928 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0765027322404 0.0866891130778 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0528233151184 0.046263068375 114% => OK
Pronouns: 0.112932604736 0.0685040099705 165% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.102003642987 0.118717715034 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0364298724954 0.0351676179071 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.15308056863 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0528233151184 0.0309702414327 171% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0728597449909 0.0887237588012 82% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00910746812386 0.0209618222197 43% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0273224043716 0.0139019557991 197% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2547.0 2387.08602151 107% => OK
No of words: 490.0 408.028673835 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19795918367 5.86048508987 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.210204081633 0.338922669872 62% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.136734693878 0.251872472559 54% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0877551020408 0.174417080927 50% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0571428571429 0.112833075102 51% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.15308056863 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504081632653 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 59.0572340534 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2727272727 20.5533526081 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8823454758 48.84282405 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.772727273 120.699889404 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2727272727 20.5533526081 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.727272727273 0.644075263715 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 35.9461966605 45.7405998639 79% => OK
Elegance: 0.909090909091 1.45489161554 62% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.092122841104 0.103427244359 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0726289218447 0.0752933317313 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.451638335714 0.497263757937 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128912398652 0.151897553556 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.403901504386 0.336927656856 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0957508412768 0.067059652881 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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