TPO 17 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advertisement is important part of our lives. It guides individuals with different choices of products, goods like food, toiletries, make up, electronics. Some people believe that advertisement make products seems better than they really are. In my humble opinion, I believe that advertisers misleads consumers to the real quality of their products. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, advertisements are widespread it can be seen everywhere from tv commercial, magazines, billboards and leaflets. It has major influence on the buying public, seeing the purpose and advantages of certain products compared to others can lead consumers choosing which advert are most convincing. Some commercial are misleading and has the main purpose of selling their product at whatever cost, like hiring a famous celebrity to endorse their product. For instance, our famous actor in the Philippines has advert on detergent soap. He says that it is the best in the market and it is affordable. As a consumer who idolizes that actor I immediately bought the product without thinking, upon using it I noticed that the soap is of bad quality and our clothes don't smell good after washing. I was dismayed because I was easily influenced by someone to purchase a product without knowing whether that product is okay or not. To sum, advert will always make their product good in the eyes of the consumers.
Secondly, commercial ads are very pleasing on the eyes, products they are selling always looks good. The main purpose of ads in the TV is to make huge sales, they will fund the commercial in a sense that their products are of top of the line. For instance, I always see commercial of energy drink in TV and I became curious if that drink will boost my energy. I used the product and it worked I became more energized at work and productive. I didn't read the label in the packaging thinking that it has positive effect on my health. I consume four bottles a day for almost a month and I enjoyed drinking it because it taste good. Hence, it has a bad effect on my health I had dizziness and palpitations at work, my doctor told me it was because of my energy drink. I was attracted to the advertisement that it will give you extra strength and focus on work, but I was not aware that I can become sick just by patronizing the product. Adverts will not include in their ads the negative effect of their products to their consumers, what they are after are just sales.
To summarize, I believe that adverts can easily mislead consumers in their products that it is the best product. It is because adverts tactics are to encourage consumers to purchase their products even it is not the best product.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...product at whatever cost, like hiring a famous celebrity to endorse their product. For instance,...
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Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'adverted'.
Suggestion: adverted
...our famous actor in the Philippines has advert on detergent soap. He says that it is t...
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Line 3, column 768, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... soap is of bad quality and our clothes dont smell good after washing. I was dismaye...
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Line 5, column 26, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... consumers. Secondly, commercial ads are very pleasing on the eyes, products they are selling ...
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Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ore energized at work and productive. I didnt read the label in the packaging thinkin...
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Line 5, column 533, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...at it has positive effect on my health. I consume four bottles a day for almost a...
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Line 5, column 618, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'tastes'?
Suggestion: tastes
...th and I enjoyed drinking it because it taste good. Hence, it has a bad effect on my ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2274.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75732217573 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69965279395 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476987447699 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6238060229 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.75 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9166666667 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08333333333 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145902782485 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048544652877 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673459269941 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106406699469 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584751969167 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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