Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that advertisers are crafty people who by using different advertising strategies try to attract people to buy products. they demonstrated products in the shape that seems very better than it really present. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that very thing that explains in the advertisement are thrust and some rival companies try to get an unreal point of view to aberrant mind of people related to them. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that advertisement getting some unrealistic information about products.
First and foremost, they show to the people something that most of the people based on their habit wants to know. For example, some on the company with high-quality products want to people believe that their products have higher quality rather other rival companies. They reveal their new products with the higher price to the commercial. As the result, most wealthy people buy these products with this idea that having the best kind of this product so other people encouraged to have this product because it is the symbol of wealth. But in fact, the quality of this product was not significantly different from other company.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that advertisement utilized the cinema methods to exhibit their products with the more beauty glance that they really are. For example, a TV advertising program for an apartment showing the space of this place in the condition where seems very bigger than it really is.
Finally, yet importantly, they hid some of the problem or unhappy concept of each product. For example, they explain that this potato chips that produced by these company procedures in the condition that led to eliminating all of the harmful effects of this kind of food that all of the people know. They say these potatoes faired with oil that led to removing Trans fatty acids from this product and produced a quite healthy food that children can be used without any concern.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that advertisers to obtaining more benefit and increased their sells changing some thrust about products. By applicating some mentally, behavior and technology or social strategy to achieve their goals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'quite healthy food'.
Suggestion: quite healthy food
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, really, so, still, for example, in fact, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06299212598 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59078119533 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522309711286 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1454502004 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.5625 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8125 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195034289236 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756973241203 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528678882795 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106866868357 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505044566324 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.