TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

There is no shortage of debate about the importance of the ability to relate well to people. In my opinion, It is very essential parameter for the success. I feel this way because of two reasons, which will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, In evolution, only human has the capability to learn and correlate themselves to the other individuals. We, human beings have learned a lots of wisdom and skill by interacting with others, therefore, human are the superior species in the animal kingdom. Those who have the capability to relate to the people are more successful in comparison to others. My own experience is a compelling example of this, I always analyze and learn knowledge by relating myself to the peoples and as a result I am more experienced and knowledgeable person in our family. Therefore, I strongly believe that it is a more valuable than a bookish knowledge.
Secondly, by interacting with the others in society, we learned a lot. Interaction and communication among the individuals maintain the values and cultures of the societies and in this way knowledge flows from one person to another. For instance, my younger daughter, she learned lot of this by relating herself to people or to that particular situation. She is very close to my mother, and receives social value and knowledge from her, which she cannot learn from the books. Therefore, I agree, that it is a essential component which help in our rational thinking.
In conclusion, human beings are social animal and we learn from our experiences, and therefor it is important to relate to other individuals.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ividuals. We, human beings have learned a lots of wisdom and skill by interacting with...
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...elling example of this, I always analyze and learn knowledge by relating myself t...
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...ng myself to the peoples and as a result I am more experienced and knowledgeable ...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'bookish knowledge'.
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...believe that it is a more valuable than a bookish knowledge. Secondly, by interacting with the ...
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...more valuable than a bookish knowledge. Secondly, by interacting with the other...
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...han a bookish knowledge. Secondly, by interacting with the others in society, ...
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...e books. Therefore, I agree, that it is a essential component which help in our r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1338.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 270.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95555555556 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90733899424 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525925925926 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6005454802 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5714285714 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128743166423 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512456795018 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429327781084 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0845086552763 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423972977263 0.0645574589148 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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