TPO 24
The occupation is the important part of adulthood life and preparing for job is very integral for everyone. Children should be familiar with their future and they should choose their lifestyles with knowledge. Personally, I believe having a part time job is not the right way for teenagers to be familiar with adult life and is not necessary. I feel this way for two reasons which i will explain in the following essay.
First of all, working in low ages is a disruptive issue for them. They are very astute. This level of child age is the best part of their life for learning. It is better for children that their parents prepare enough facilities for them to educate. Teenagers have a high level of energy in this level of their life and parents should not waste their time with unnecessary and time-consuming activities. Teenagers can learn about adult life in the schools by teachers easily. About ten years ago, When i was in high school; we had summer school that we have thought about adulthood skills. some persons with different jobs came and spoke about their jobs and their experience.
secondly, Teenagers are in the sensitive level of their life emotionally sine they face some hormonal changes in their body. therefore being out of home places may be harmful for their future. Their decision making systems in these ages are based on emotion. My brother was working and he was teenager. He faced a lot of different people. He had adult friends . his friends not only have adult thought but also they were very persuasive.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that teenagers should be in the safe place. They should study hard and use of these times for increasing their skills. It is very beneficial for their adulthood. Also, this age is very important in everyone's life. Peoples in this age are very delicate and work life is full of social dangers for them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 242, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...owledge. Personally, I believe having a part time job is not the right way for teenagers ...
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Line 1, column 382, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
.... I feel this way for two reasons which i will explain in the following essay. ...
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Line 3, column 502, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...chers easily. About ten years ago, When i was in high school; we had summer schoo...
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Line 3, column 590, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...we have thought about adulthood skills. some persons with different jobs came and sp...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...out their jobs and their experience. secondly, Teenagers are in the sensitive level o...
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Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ce some hormonal changes in their body. therefore being out of home places may be harmful...
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Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: therefore,
...ce some hormonal changes in their body. therefore being out of home places may be harmful...
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Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...f different people. He had adult friends . his friends not only have adult thought...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: His
...ifferent people. He had adult friends . his friends not only have adult thought but...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76758409786 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47321876306 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504587155963 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6987247033 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.9583333333 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.625 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95833333333 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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