Everyone in this world wants their children to become a good human being and to be successful in all the fields of life. There are many ways that parents usually adopt to facilitate their child to instill good qualities in them that will allow them to achieve their dream. Some people think that motivating their child to take a part-time job is the best way to help them whereas, many people do not think alike because they consider it as a waste of time. In my opinion it is the best way of parenting a child for following reasons.
Firstly, child at teenage is more prone to get spoiled in various nuisance activities and devastate their future. In modern world, there are so many latest technologies such as internet, computer and mobile phones that tend to divert the attention of young generation from their main goal. Teen agers spend more time on chatting on social networking sites in their spare time which lead them to certain risks to get involved in wrong things. I can recall one of the incidences shown on Discovery Channel where a seventeen year old boy killed a father of his girl friend whom he got to know through social networking site. According to the boy his friend told her that her father used to molest her but later it was found out that she was a mental patient and all she said to him was a fake story. That is why, it is necessary to engage children in constructive activities in their free time.
Second, it is very important to realize the value of money to become successful in life. Mostly, majority the parents provide great comfort and all the facilities to their children in order to help them to build a good future. On the contrary, they are depriving their kids to face the real challenges in life. On the other hand, when a child is doing a part-time job, she/he indeed learns the significance and how difficult it is to earn it. This not only makes them wiser but it also restrains them to waste money over unnecessary luxury items such expensive mobile phones etc.
To recapitulate, I would like to suggest that doing a part- time job is essential not only for students whose parents can’t afford the expense of their education. But it even contributes in building a strong foundation of those kids as well whose rich parents can unintentionally ruin their bright future by providing them unnecessary luxury things that will distract them from their main aim.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: adapt to
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... items such expensive mobile phones etc. To recapitulate, I would like to suggest...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'whereas', 'such as', 'in my opinion', 'on the contrary', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.20697167756 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.176470588235 0.158761421928 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.113289760349 0.0866891130778 131% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0435729847495 0.046263068375 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0980392156863 0.0685040099705 143% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0936819172113 0.118717715034 79% => OK
Participles: 0.0348583877996 0.0351676179071 99% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.48332801775 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0566448801743 0.0309702414327 183% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00217864923747 0.00188951952338 115% => OK
Determiners: 0.0718954248366 0.0887237588012 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0130718954248 0.0209618222197 62% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0261437908497 0.0139019557991 188% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2416.0 2387.08602151 101% => OK
No of words: 427.0 408.028673835 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65807962529 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.28337236534 0.338922669872 84% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.19906323185 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.138173302108 0.174417080927 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.100702576112 0.112833075102 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48332801775 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543325526932 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 63.1141065106 59.2087087015 107% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 25.1176470588 20.5533526081 122% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0022364147 48.84282405 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.117647059 120.699889404 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1176470588 20.5533526081 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.823529411765 0.644075263715 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 45.0239702438 45.7405998639 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.05479452055 1.45489161554 72% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399834339884 0.300154397459 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108038550327 0.103427244359 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0427889151662 0.0752933317313 57% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.530133620706 0.497263757937 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0994844519005 0.151897553556 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1685115716 0.114077575197 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622899166195 0.0781384742642 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.401611559809 0.336927656856 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0670337067805 0.067059652881 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292467064935 0.210909579961 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529028114638 0.0618886996521 85% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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