Taking into account the fact that the young people spent most of time on study or work, I agree that some young people nowadays fail to spare enough time for community service.But due to the policy of some high schools and
universities that students are required to serve the community, the improved community is attributed to the efforts of some young people.
To begin with, for some university students, the community service gives way to the study.University students have to work hard enough in a bid to guarantee high GPA which would benefit them in the long run if they decide to pursue further education or lucrative career.Take medical students for example. Overwhelmed by subjects ranging from basic biomedical science to molecular immunology, students have to deal with assignments and laboratory reports following the courses. Obviously, they invest more time on solving academic problems than on addressing community issues.
Secondly, for some young employees, community service gives way to the work. On one hand, the work schedule is tight for staffs at their twenties. Chances are high that they are required to work for additional hours partly because young people are at the disposal of the superordinate. On the other hand, some young employees give priority to earning money so as to feed themselves and parents. In this case, the burden of feeding the whole family drives them to be preoccupied with work rather than the community service. As a result, the more time they spend handling the paperwork or answering the telephone at the company, the less time they spend refurbishing the neighbor’s house or clearing up the streets at the community.
However, some young people indeed help their communities because a number of high schools and universities mandate that young undergraduates should be engaged in community service during each winter or summer vacation. In some high schools, for example, one of requirement for receiving a diploma is that students must fulfill two hundred hours of community service. Besides, many colleges make community service an unofficial requirement for admission. For this reason, young people are able to play different roles in building a better community and conferring benefits to residents by writing newsletters, organizing art events or working at local clinics.
To sum up, although I concede that some students are committed to community service due to the policy of the school, there are some factors, I think, holding young people back from devoting sufficient time to helping their communities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 15.1003584229 7% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 1.0 43.0788530466 2% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 52.1666666667 13% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3032.0 1977.66487455 153% => OK
No of words: 6.0 407.700716846 1% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 505.333333333 4.8611393121 10395% => Less chars per word wanted.
Fourth root words length: 1.56508458007 4.48103885553 35% => The fourth root words length is low.
Word Length SD: 275.643288005 2.67179642975 10317% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 6.0 212.727598566 3% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 1.0 0.524837075471 191% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 113.9 1.51630824373 7512% => Avg_syllables_per_word is high.
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 6.0 20.1344086022 30% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 3032.0 100.406767564 3020% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 6.0 20.6045352989 29% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 47.0 5.45110844103 862% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 11.8709677419 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145160767931 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145160767931 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0888390736322 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041026318933 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 2361.7 11.7677419355 20069% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -9435.19 58.1214874552 -16234% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 1330.8 10.1575268817 13102% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 2910.08 10.9000537634 26698% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 19.72 8.01818996416 246% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 6.0 86.8835125448 7% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 44.4 10.0537634409 442% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 2362.0 10.247311828 23050% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 40.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 12.0 Out of 30
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