I certainly agree that young people today do not give sufficient time and energy to assist their communities. Somebody can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
Firstly, modern technology changes young persons' attitudes toward the life. These days, all people experience a huge advancement and improvement in different fields of technology and science including transportation, communication, health caring, and artificial intelligence. All of these theoretical and practical achievements not only change human's physical world but also affect young people's opinion and idea toward the universe, creation, and life. In fact, youngsters now perhaps are more interested to move or being up to date with new inventions and equipments such as smart phones or digital computers. In other words, nowadays, in the view of young people, helping to the communities do not have a same priority that had in the past.
Furthermore, time limitation is another noticeable support. Nowadays, both young and old people have to work hard enough to make more money, and so either purchase whatever or go wherever the like or want. Someone, for instance, has to start working early in the morning and continue it until late at night. Besides, the school or university assignments possibly keep busy youngster for long hours, and as a consequence there is not any free time for children to allot for their communities.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that youngsters now devote more time for communities. Mainly, university teachers and professors try to aware them about communities’ importance or valuable for society. In additional, there are lots of youth voluntary groups which attempt to contribute communities. However still I affirm that boys and girls today do not dedicate adequate time or attention to their communities. Although there are some awareness and group activities, based on a research study, which has been carried out by Harvard University in 2015, only 30% of young people participated in those mentioned groups. It also predicts that this participation will be reduced to 20% for next year.
Due to aforementioned ground, I think that all folk should bear in mind that young men and women nowadays do not pay necessary time to their communities. Participation of thinking and time are to prime and conspicuous factors.
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Essay evaluation report
helping to the communities do not have a same priority that had in the past.
helping to the communities does not have a same priority that had in the past.
both young and old people have to work hard enough to make more money, and so either purchase whatever or go wherever the like or want.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
Someone, for instance, has to start working early in the morning and continue it until late at night.
Description: 'it' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
keep busy youngster for long hours,
keep youngster busy for long hours,
as a consequence there is not any free time for children to allot for their communities.
as a consequence there is no any free time for children to allot for their communities.
university teachers and professors try to aware them about communities’ importance or valuable for society.
Description: 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
are to prime and conspicuous factors.
are two prime and conspicuous factors.
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1967 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.163 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.918 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.934 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.274 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.504 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.033 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'as to', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.278422273782 0.229887763892 121% => OK
Verbs: 0.127610208817 0.158761421928 80% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0951276102088 0.0866891130778 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0672853828306 0.046263068375 145% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0232018561485 0.0685040099705 34% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0997679814385 0.118717715034 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0208816705336 0.0351676179071 59% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.06340930121 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0348027842227 0.0309702414327 112% => OK
Particles: 0.0046403712297 0.00188951952338 246% => OK
Determiners: 0.0626450116009 0.0887237588012 71% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00696055684455 0.0209618222197 33% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0092807424594 0.0139019557991 67% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2414.0 2387.08602151 101% => OK
No of words: 381.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 6.33595800525 5.86048508987 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.362204724409 0.338922669872 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.288713910761 0.251872472559 115% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.233595800525 0.174417080927 134% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.167979002625 0.112833075102 149% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06340930121 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622047244094 0.524397521467 119% => OK
Word variations: 77.3254759749 59.2087087015 131% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.05 20.5533526081 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9254368786 48.84282405 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.7 120.699889404 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 20.5533526081 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.85 0.644075263715 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 47.9213910761 45.7405998639 105% => OK
Elegance: 1.82978723404 1.45489161554 126% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352689017878 0.300154397459 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0581277964084 0.103427244359 56% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0457300137299 0.0752933317313 61% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.476683301276 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.13362842215 0.151897553556 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12257212265 0.114077575197 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859026043449 0.0781384742642 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.307076664652 0.336927656856 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.016179617463 0.067059652881 24% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239590818136 0.210909579961 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340836496489 0.0618886996521 55% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.