TPO 26: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent's jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parent's jobs.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Ever since the dawn of civilization, youth are craving to achieve a bright and prosperous future by choosing a promising career. Whereas some people advocate that children should have a different job from their parents' jobs, others disagree. Honestly, I believe that children should follow in the footsteps of their parents when choosing a career. I feel that way for two compelling reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, choosing the same career as parents paves a more convenient way to success for children. To be more specific, children who share the same occupation can inherit their parents' experiences to save them much time and energy along their career path. For example, my father-in-law is one of the most renowned brain surgeons in Egypt, and my husband also has chosen to be a brain surgeon. That choice helped my husband tremendously because his father gave him all his cumulative knowledge, trial, errors, and experience. As a result, he was well-prepared for that career. Not to mention that my father-in-law provided my husband also with a shortcut to success by leaving him a well-run and famous hospital. Therefore, we live a wealthy life. If my husband had chosen a different career from his father, we would never have lived that rich lifestyle that we have now.
Secondly, another remarkable potential benefit of having the same parents' job is the higher likelihood of strengthening a parent-child bond. I mean, nowadays, in the fast-paced modernized world, everybody is quite busy with his work, trying to achieve as much as he can to improve in his field, which leaves no spare time for family connectivity. Furthermore, generation gaps increase due to a lack of common topics that they converse about it. However, sharing the same career can undoubtedly support their relationship and bridge their generation gap. For instance, my mother and I both are pharmacists; my best and most enjoyable time is when I am with her. She is the first one I turn to when I need professional guidance; I feel I cannot trust or count on anyone but my mother to mentor and guide me. She came across my same challenges. Consequently, my mother became my best friend, and our relationship has never been better since I enrolled in pharmacy school and she was helping me in my studying and throughout my career path. As you can see, I like many others who share the same career with their parents, build strong bonds.
In a nutshell, I highly recommend that children choose to have the same career as their parents. Not only does it ensure a successful and convenient path for their jobs, but it also helps them to enhance their relationship with their parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, honestly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, i feel, i mean, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2244.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89956331878 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7925482516 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528384279476 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1458744805 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5652173913 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9130434783 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26086956522 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219154755096 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692976278117 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735696967379 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165425162471 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710660637897 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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