TPO 27: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Our Jobs play a critically important role in our life. Indeed, it shapes our future, happiness, and satisfaction. Whereas some people opt for the idea of accepting a secure job rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. I undoubtedly incline to choose an occupation of my dream.
I feel that way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, working in a job that we do not like and solely because it is secure would lead to a lifelong disappointment. To be more specific, when we do things we do not like, we will not be devoted to it, which will leave no room to improve to leave us with a miserable feeling. For instance, my cousin previously worked as a civil servant in a local government department. His primary job there was to draft the department director's speech and deal with repetitive paperwork. He always seemed depressed because he did not get promoted or achieved any personal improvement. Feeling that his job is monotonous, he quit. Eventually, he found his dream job in a multinational real estate corporation, and he is fully committed to fulfilling his career's various tasks. He acquires diverse experiences that qualified him to get promoted as a sales manager there; he feels a strong sense of self-accomplishment. Had not for his insistence to have the job that matches his preference, he would never have achieved his self-satisfaction.
Furthermore, people who prioritize a satisfying career gain more happiness due to a better financial situation than those who choose a secure job. For example, a long time ago, my husband and his best friend graduated from pharmacy school; they got an opportunity to work in a retail pharmacy with a modest salary; his friend accepted the job right away. However, my husband refused since it was not satisfactory for his ambition. Accordingly, he kept searching for a better chance till he found a golden opportunity in one of the most respectable pharmaceutical companies. Currently, my husband earns a substantial income with enormous privileges. We can travel abroad yearly. On the other hand, his friend is still working in the same retail pharmacy, with a humble standard of living, and cannot enjoy his life. As you can see, although money does not equal happiness, no one can deny that the power of wealth to enhance and make people's life more enjoyable.
In a nutshell, I believe that waiting for a perfect and satisfying job is much better than accepting a secure job. Not only because it gives us an unreplaceable feeling of self-accomplishment, but also it provides us with a financial position that enables us to have a more enjoyable and happy living.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, whereas, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2235.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91208791209 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10674247573 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549450549451 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0709317508 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.125 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9583333333 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312626489655 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815519084677 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876994264094 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171191725712 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618056117288 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.