It is commonly conceived that a work is rather pleasant if it is done by a satisfied person. With all this what should a person do if he has a good and secure job offer but not in his interest. Some people might contend that accepting the job is the better choice. However, I stand for the other choice and I am going to support my selection in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, I firmly believe that, no matter how much secure a job is going to be if it does not appeal to the employee, no effective result is going to come out of it. That person just tries to get the job done and not thinking if it's the right and efficient route or not. As a result, his work is not going to be beneficial neither for the company nor for the prosperity of himself.
The second but important reason is that, if a person choose the secure job, he wouldn't find a good amount of time to search for the job that favors him. Therefore, he most likely will give up following his dream and will end up staying in that job. To illustrate it, from my friend's experience, who had a tremendous passion to work in Microsoft company and change his major to Computer Science. However, following his parents’ advice and because they agreed to fund his studying if he choose medical, he picked that path. As far as I am concerned, he never was happy with it, and never had time and the motivation after years of studying medical to change his major.
Last but not least, a person who follows his dreams and wait for his favorite job will face no psychological problem. Combining the pressure of searching a pleasant job with the a unsatisfying, arduous workplace brings about different psychological problems in one's mind. In fact, I strongly believe that the cost of an unhealthy body outweigh the opportunity cost of the denied job.
To sum up, for all aforementioned ground, choosing an available but unfavorable job will cost the person more than denying it due to harming his psychology. Moreover, this person would not be an efficient person in this job and wouldn't find much time to pursue his dreams either.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...to get the job done and not thinking if its the right and efficient route or not. A...
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Line 5, column 80, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
..., if a person choose the secure job, he wouldnt find a good amount of time to search fo...
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Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
... they agreed to fund his studying if he choose medical, he picked that path. As far as...
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Line 5, column 557, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was never
...that path. As far as I am concerned, he never was happy with it, and never had time and t...
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Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...essure of searching a pleasant job with the a unsatisfying, arduous workplace brings ...
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Line 7, column 179, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...re of searching a pleasant job with the a unsatisfying, arduous workplace brings ...
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Line 7, column 262, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...out different psychological problems in ones mind. In fact, I strongly believe that ...
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Line 9, column 229, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... be an efficient person in this job and wouldnt find much time to pursue his dreams eit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, in fact, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55380577428 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61290802005 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511811023622 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.3777875767 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.058823529 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4117647059 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215175479587 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744625633149 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390987593935 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128594387505 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023065421411 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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