TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Throughout recent decades, education has been one of the most contentious issues which permits people to have a better life circumstances and improve their life qualities. The majority of parents hope that their kids be prosperous people through getting more knowledge in their future so that they can be proud of them. Whether parents are more engaged with their kids' education nowadays or in past, is the controversial issue that needs some words to explain here. I firmly agree upon the view that parents are more involved recently rather than past. In what follows, I will explore my perspective about this issue.

First off, one should take into account this considerable fact that the population of the families has declined. While people used to bring up more children in order to help them out in house works and making money, they did not pay attention to their education and they considered education as an impediment for them. Take my father for instance. He grew up in a large-populated family and their only way for living was working on land and doing difficult agricultural tasks. If children did not work and help their parents, they would have been punished. Now consider if they were busy with doing their homework and going to school. Never could they do both issues together.

Another subtle point that is worthy to mention is that by advance in technology and living in a modern and hectic life, the competition between people to find proper job has been more intricate. Advancing in education quality led companies to seek for better educated and skillful workers. Take an educated person and a really common person as an example. An educated person is more likely to get a job position in the company rather than the other since he knows a lot about the principle of workplace even though he does not have enough experiences. All I mean is that parents consider these circumstances and make their children study and get a diploma in university.

To put it briefly, contemplating all reasons, one soon realizes that parents nowadays pay more attention to their children's education because it not only leads them to be a better person due to the fact that they kids live in not crowded families, but also gives them a good opportunity to have a better job in future

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 392, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...d with their kids education nowadays or in past, is the controversial issue that needs ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 214, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'kid'
Suggestion: kid
...better person due to the fact that they kids live in not crowded families, but also ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, if, really, so, while, for instance, i mean

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86224489796 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60406084055 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545918367347 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.4525328623 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.888888889 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20499289178 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687356429474 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060874295187 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127434644879 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484403146275 0.0645574589148 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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