Because the world changes so quickly, people are now less happy or satisfied with their lives than they were with people in the past.
In this rapidly changing world, people are busily living up to the development.
You probably have both good and bad points because of the way you live your life. While some focus on the disadvantages of being pressured and stressed in the world too soon, others focus on the benefits rather than the disadvantages and live positively. From my perspective, I think the benefits gained are correctable with the disadvantages as the world changes so quickly.
First, society has come a long way as it changes rapidly, and we are making a profit in the convenience of the high-tech industry. For instance, services such as delivery and delivery services have developed, so if you have money, you can receive what you want at home quickly and conveniently. Only a few decades ago in Korea, you had to go to a market or market where you had to buy something you had to buy. Who would think the present is worse than in the past if we lived so comfortably?
Second, the world is changing rapidly and communication devices have also evolved. So, we can say hello directly to our long-distance friends and continue our conversation through the media. Also, I can chat with my friends in foreign countries easily and have good experiences and memories through the Internet. It keeps up the relationship with old friends, makes new friends, and kills two birds with one stone.
Finally, because there is so much information right now, it helps us consume or do things when we are about to do them, so there is no wasted time and less wasted money. As the old saying goes that time is gold, time is very important. Knowing what you don't have to spend a lot of time on and reducing the trial and error through indirect experience saves time. It can also save you money. By saving time, by building up experience, you can live the world happily.
In short, it seems that there is no point in focusing on the disadvantages with these various benefits. Also, since we are modern people living in modern times, it is better to be able to live happily with the benefits of modern society.
- TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 60
- TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 60
- TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 70
- TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 70
- TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 254, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ime is very important. Knowing what you dont have to spend a lot of time on and redu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, second, so, while, for instance, i think, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6905370844 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60887116405 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531969309463 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9311494389 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.55 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316382469126 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962290799643 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123922088911 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191570295918 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.169283119941 0.0645574589148 262% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.