TPO 32 Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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TPO-32 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Young people play an important role in society, and there are many differences between countries in terms of the importance they give to the future generation. In my opinion, I disagree with that statement, as it depends on the country we are talking about. The reasons why I feel this was will be explained in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, in well-developed countries, young people are the key to success. In other words, they know that young people will be the future presidents, doctors, teachers, among other things and they give them a place f in the biggest decisions to be made. The case of Finland and Sweden are great examples of this. A couple of years ago, my aunt moved to Finland to work. There she got married and started a family, when her son started to grow up, she was worried about his higher education, as the cost of living in those countries is not cheap. Her husband told her that she had nothing to worry about, since the government itself covers those expenses for young people. She couldn't believe it, his husband is another example of this, he attended one of the best universities in Finland without spending a lot of money, now he is a famous engineer. A country couldn't make this kind of decision easily, but Finland saw the potential in the youth to make that choice and take the risk for the future and benefit of their own country. If my aunt had not had that experience we would not have known about this great opportunity on the other side of the world.

Moreover, other countries prefer to give importance to unimportant things rather than the wellness of a society. Leaders are difficult to understand but today, in many third-world countries no one can trust a leader, since it is difficult to do so. My own experience living in one of such countries demonstrates this reality. When I was in high school, a lot of prices raised, including the monthly cost of my private, low average school. We were desperate as the only two options we had was, pay or drop out school. Thankfully my parents could cover those expenses, but I started to compare why in countries like the USA people don't have to pay for high school, and they even have a good quality education and infrastructures, while in Peru, there are more private schools rather than national ones. It was there that I understood the importance young people have in the decisions made by the government, something that I wish was the same in most third-world countries. The USA decided to have many good quality national high schools in order that parents can save money for years for their higher education, because young people are the future of their country. This illustrates the different goals and thoughts that a society has.

In conclusion, I disagree with that statement since there are differences between countries. My main reasons are that first world countries know that the future of their countries relies on the youth, so they give them a lot of priority when a decision is made. However, it's not the same when we refer to a third world country, where young people have nothing to do with important decisions, they have a lack of knowledge in that part so they decide to choose unimportant things and that's why they don't progress, since they don't see the big potential the youth has and don't give them opportunities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, third, well, while, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, talking about, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2762.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 586.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7133105802 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92010537223 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59872455022 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453924914676 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 846.0 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6701045925 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.083333333 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158929731461 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495981175082 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390833686545 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116281369666 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032489314745 0.0645574589148 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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