Governments today are in the strict competition to find effective ways to develop their countries in all aspects of life. In this regard, there is no shortage of debates about what generation would receive financial support from the government. In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea that university people play a crucial role in future life of the country. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, university students understand education’s importance on their life more effectively compared with five to ten years old children. This is because that people are interested in entertainment activities rather than studies in their childhood. My friend Farid’s experience is compelling example of it. When he was eight years old, Farid did not prepare for any of the studies. He played with his friends different games to sunset, so Farid could not have a time to study. His teachers reported it to his parents, and they explained knowledge’s importance to him. He improved himself year by year, and now Farid Is a student in one of the best universities. He always writes his homework in time and scores highly on exams. As a result, Farid is an excellent one who can develop our country.
Secondly, today’s young people have many innovative ideas which are financially beneficial if they complete it successfully. This is obvious that government could expand country’s budget by providing university people with money. My cousin Ali’s experience is compelling example of this trend. He was a student in ordinary university. He had invented a technological machine which produced energy from rain water, but he could not exhibit this to the world because of financial lack. Our government afforded Ali with money, so he would show his invention to the world. He contracted with our country’s officials, so our country sold these machines to other countries. As a result, our country expanded its budget and improved the lifestyle of people.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that government must support financially to university children than young children. This is because that university student understands the importance of education on our life. Also, country could enlarge its budget by providing university students with money.
- TOEFL T P O 47 Integrated Writing Task 52
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- TPO 36 integrated writing 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?“Overall, the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today's world." Use reasons and details to support your opinion. 76
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31451612903 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05085973375 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55376344086 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.1239119085 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.375 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.20833333333 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178027398134 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514973107745 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544144265564 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11581914625 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369298496858 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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