Nowadays, people are dealing with sophisticated challenges because of rising advanced technologies. One of these challenges is fining an appropriate job or career. Some people believe that identifying a proper job in the past was easier than today. However, others look from different lens. From my perspective, todays looking for a career is more comfortable than in the past. I will elaborate on my opinion through two strong reasons.
First and foremost reason is that there are a variety of job opportunities in modern societies. I mean, by the advent of technologies such as social media, people can identify some tech jobs which they did not exist in the past few years. people not only can identify more perfect jobs but also can establish their own jobs easily. For instance, one of my friend and some other ones established a company just with six persons. They work on tech projects and they did not rely on any organization. After a while, they made their company bigger and employed more engineers and workers. Hence, they could identify a potential job opportunities for themselves and some others, too.
The second reason is that people are inclining to be more educated than before. As we know, education improves mind and power of thinking. A modern person whom is well-educated can understand the conditions and society’s needs better than traditional people. Thus, they would have powerful analysis ability. Although, traditional people could easily find job, they alway followed their ancestors’ jobs. For example, students whom enter to the university, can be familiar with all aspects of society and also can discover their own abilities, too. After all, they can identify the best job based on their knowledge which earn during their education periods.
To put it briefly, As I mentioned above, I believe modern people are living in a satisfaction circumstances to identify the most perfect career in order to be successful in the future . Not only they have more job opportunities to find but also are they well-educated in modern days to decide better than unknowledgeable people in the past . Hence, people can live more comfortable than before.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, hence, however, if, look, second, so, thus, well, while, after all, for example, for instance, i mean, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16338028169 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90771683989 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540845070423 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6373245852 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6956521739 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4347826087 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95652173913 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120095057175 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397752402186 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379527960375 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0820044940893 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252550748899 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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