TPO 40
As time passes and people become more developed, they become more aware of the importance of children' upbringing since they are the cornerstone of a successful society. In this regard, education plays a vital role in preparing children for the future. Parents utilize various methods to encourage their children to study. As far as I am concerned, offering money to school-age children is one of the effective ways to encourage children to focus on their studies based on quite a few reasons, three of the most substantial of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The most compelling reason is that it is statistically proven that while children know that they effort are rewarded, they have more motivation to study, which leads to enhance their school performance in general and increase their scores in particular. I clarify my point of view with the true story that happened to me. When I was a child, I was paid by parents due to washing the dishes. Even though they did not pay me much and washing the dishes was boring and time consuming, I was looking forward doing dishes.
Another advantage of offering money to children for each good score in school is that Nowadays, everyone has to be in rush so as not to be left behind in contending for the "field of competition", and they work more and more to reach their goals, which bring them about fortune. Given the existing economic situation and the today's competitive and unpredicted environment, individuals should be more conservative regarding spending their money, and they are required to save their money as much as them can, due to the fact that their savings help them in the rainy days. Therefore, it is better for mankind to learn saving from childhood rather than learning it in dilemmas, for people behave in the way that they have learned from their childhood. As a point in view, I have a friend, who was wealthy in the past, he used to spend his money in a meaningless manner. Unfortunately, two years ago, his company went bankrupt, and he lost whatever he had. Now, he is working as a waiter in a restaurant in down town. If was aware of the significance of saving money and saved money, his savings could help him. There is a Persian proverb, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this, "Children's mind is like a White stone, anything that you write on it, it will be remain for a long time", which indicate the significance of learning in childhood.
Last but not least, they can be happier owing to the fact that they can buy whatever they like. For instance, I managed to purchase a doll, which I was really into it, thanks to the money that I had made from washing dishes.
In summary, having considered all the aforementioned arguments discussed above, I firmly endorse my point of view that not only does offering money to children to study motivate them to improve their school performance, but also it helps them to understand the value of money and saving, which paves the way for their success. Moreover, it gives them a chance to purchase whatever they like, which brings them about happiness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 628, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to save'.
Suggestion: to save
...fore, it is better for mankind to learn saving from childhood rather than learning it ...
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Line 3, column 854, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a meaningless manner" with adverb for "meaningless"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...in the past, he used to spend his money in a meaningless manner. Unfortunately, two years ago, his comp...
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Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., I firmly endorse my point of view that not only does offering money to children...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'really', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'as to', 'for instance', 'in general', 'in particular', 'in summary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.196399345336 0.229887763892 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.189852700491 0.158761421928 120% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0540098199673 0.0866891130778 62% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0458265139116 0.046263068375 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0998363338789 0.0685040099705 146% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.127659574468 0.118717715034 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0589198036007 0.0351676179071 168% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.73546790083 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0409165302782 0.0309702414327 132% => OK
Particles: 0.00163666121113 0.00188951952338 87% => OK
Determiners: 0.0687397708674 0.0887237588012 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0114566284779 0.0209618222197 55% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0212765957447 0.0139019557991 153% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3120.0 2387.08602151 131% => OK
No of words: 540.0 408.028673835 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77777777778 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.48200974243 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.309259259259 0.338922669872 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.235185185185 0.251872472559 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.168518518519 0.174417080927 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.105555555556 0.112833075102 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73546790083 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509259259259 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 61.7526568497 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.5533526081 131% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.3893946037 48.84282405 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.0 120.699889404 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.5533526081 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.644075263715 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 50.5185185185 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.14146341463 1.45489161554 78% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.121357784384 0.103427244359 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0763948150296 0.0752933317313 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.518645535559 0.497263757937 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.165898070104 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.333964883867 0.336927656856 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0412126245089 0.067059652881 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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