Today, students are the most important member of societies. Education is integral part of student's life which should be cared so much. Some parent think for increasing their children functionality they could offer them amount of money as reward in the condition of receiving high mark in school exams. in my point of view althogh this plan is good, they can offer them something else instead of money. This money can cause some bad results.
First, there are numbers of disadvantages to this money. At first offering money to student over times can become one habit and they can get rid of it easily if the parent refuse to give money to student they will become depress.
At the second, Children might consume this money in bad ways such as buying cigarate, buying alchohol, spending for night clubs and so on. These bad usage of money not only do it waste the students time, but also can have some bad psychology influence on them.
Another alternative should be noticed instead of money. Buying video games can attract children and it does not have harmful result for children. Going to trip is another way to encourage student. A good trip can excite students and they can learn new things during the travel. It is valuable to notice that students must have one incentive in their study and this increases their outputs during their courses. In my opinin, every school should have consider some rewards for top students and with this plan student encourage to do their best and this plan have many benefits for society.
In conclusion, since the disadvantage of offering money to students over weigh advantages it is recommended that another alternative such as buying video game for them or offering some exciting trips should be made.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...of receiving high mark in school exams. in my point of view althogh this plan is g...
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Line 6, column 451, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
... In my opinin, every school should have consider some rewards for top students and with ...
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Line 6, column 527, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...ts and with this plan student encourage to do their best and this plan have many bene...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87583892617 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37455175006 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540268456376 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3640725474 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8125 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.625 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237431071585 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851195433998 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073658993251 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143838091531 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598480267683 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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