TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

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TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

Submitted by rena1071 on Tue, 06/25/2019 - 12:35

Without a shadow of the diubt, having a good job plays a vital role in individual's condition in society. A good job provides us money, security and also the prestige in the community. Many people contend that if people have the chance to get a secure job, they should take it, while others assert that having a satisfying job is better for people. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that having a satisfying job is a better option for us than having a secure job. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and probably the paramount reason is that I really believe that having joy and satisfaction in a job are much more important than security or money or even prestige. However, I really think by having a more satisfying job and having joy in it we can make more money. For example, my father was an ordinary clark in a bank with a typical salary, but he had a secure job. I remember that my father was not happy about her job because he dreamed to be a writer. After a while, he resigned and started to wrire a novel and eventually, he published it. Now, his work is one of the famous novels in all over the world. His work brings greate opportuinities like wealth and fame for him. As you can see, having satysfying job is a good choise for people.
Another point springing to mind is that life is too short for remaining in one place and limiting ourselves for chasing our dreams. We have to work hard for fulfilling our desires. Having a secure job without any adventur is very boring, at least for me. The world is foul of opportuinities and going to different places can be a so much promising step to obtain these chances. So, finding a satysfying job can be one of these chances. We cannot lose it. The only thing that we have do is garabbing these chances. As a result, having a satisfying job can not only brings us different chances but also makes us feel strong.
The mentioned reasons are the first ones cross to the mined as the advantages od having a satisfying job, but there is a disadvantage too. There is a possibility that it takes too time to obtain a good job in a community foul of expert people. So, we have to prepare ourselves to do all kind of jobs. However, by working hard and enhancing our skills and abilities we can increase our chance in job hunting. So, by managing the situation and doing our tasks we can eliminate the disadvantage of waiting for having a satisfying job.
To sum it all up, it is easy to see the advantages of having a satisfying job compared to have a secure job. A satisfying job creates us good opportunity to make more money and having advanture in our life. Also life is too short for limiting ourselves to do ordinary tasks. I hope some day we can experience the work that reaaly satisfies us.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 483, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...ot lose it. The only thing that we have do is garabbing these chances. As a result...
^^
Line 3, column 564, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'can' requires base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...t, having a satisfying job can not only brings us different chances but also makes us ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...money and having advanture in our life. Also life is too short for limiting ourselve...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, while, at least, for example, kind of, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 540.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43333333333 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59323008035 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448148148148 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 785.7 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5706270809 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.2258064516 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4193548387 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315539123795 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914371117289 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686291467131 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203154200846 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505201310567 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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