In modern days, parents are busy with their work, working in offices to fulfil their families financial as well as physical need. In this way, they are spending very less time with their kids. These days, it is a hot topic of debate that how we need to take care of our kid in such busy life schedule. In an opinion, the best way to spend time with kids is to have fun with them. There is following reason, will explain in the essay.
To begin with, developing kids need a proper parenting, however, these days parents are busy with their work and have less time to spare with their kids. Therefore, current situation triggers a debate in the psychologist and neuroscientist, according to the few scientific reports, for the proper development of the kids it is necessary to have fun with them. Because these kids are stressed with the school work and their parents are away with them during this period, which may lead a negative impact. To overcome this parent need to play or have fun with them. For example, my younger daughter is 5 year old, after coming from the school, she looks like stressed and to motivate her I prefer to play with her, we use to go for a walk and do lots of funny stuff.
Secondly, the kids spent their lot of time in school, during this period these kids learn lots of things related to the subjects, but they didn’t get enough time to relax or to motivate by their parent. Therefore, they need some time to relax with their parents, according to the neuroscientist playing game or such kind of activities with their parent boost their learning abilities. For example, my nephew is 6 old, at the beginning of his class, his parent indulges him in homework, his parents spend lots of time with his homework and in this way, he was unable to relax. In the result of this activity, he scored very low mark and unable to pay attention in class.
Finally, we all want our kid to be successful and happy in the world, therefore it’s our duty to spend time in a positive manner and more meaningful.
In conclusion, we have to spend our time in more meaningful ways, and personally, I will prefer to play or have fun with them in my spare time
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive manner" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...refore it's our duty to spend time in a positive manner and more meaningful. In conclusion, w...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y or have fun with them in my spare time
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50125944584 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4032497292 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48362720403 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4219658159 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.6875 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8125 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6875 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321374307734 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121095818659 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847289577439 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192605251637 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660782001289 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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