TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Hobbies and pastime are the inseparable parts of human life. It does not matter who you are or how busy you are; to have a healthy and happy life, you should have leisure time and enjoy it as best one can. Some people believe that parents should spend their time with their child helping them in courses they enroll and homework. While others do not concede with this point of view. In my opinion, the best way, bustling parents can spend their time with their child is having fun and playing games and sports with them. The reason why I believe so is manifold three of which, however, is of great consequence which I will elaborate upon hereunder.
First, while parents decided to spend the limited time they have by having funs and doing some sports; they will teach their child that there is a significant issue to take good care of their health by having such a hobbies. For instance, if parents go swimming with their children they will have fun and also can teach them that no matter how bussy you are, you should exercise in order to maintain a good health condition.
Secondary, parents will also teach their children through games. Thus, besides having the fun time, children can learn and use their sense of creativity and logic to solve problems and games. As an illustration, while I was a child, my father and I used to play puzzles with each other, while I was enjoying the time, owing to the wisdom of my beloved father I got to think more and use my imaginary potential more. So as can be inferred from the example above while I was having a great time and enjoying my leisure time with my busy parents I got to have a better quality of imagination and also broaden my knowledge and creativity.
In the long run, when parents and children play sports and games together they get close to each other and will be more intimate. While if they just spend time doing homework, the child and parents will pay a cumbersome time together where both are willing to get finish sooner, and they will not understand each other correctly. During the fun time, parents could ask about their child problem and also asking she/he simple questions that how did you spend your day?; issues that will amplify their friendship relation. While if parents choose to only study with their child asking such a question will be no more than a distraction.
All in all, with having in mind the parents are the essential source which will provide children how to behave and act; I am a great believer that parents should spend their spare time with having fun with their children, so they can help them in each aspect of life and teach them how to live.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...em in courses they enroll and homework. While others do not concede with this point o...
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Line 2, column 215, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a hobby' or simply 'hobbies'?
Suggestion: a hobby; hobbies
...ood care of their health by having such a hobbies. For instance, if parents go swimming w...
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Line 4, column 521, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...will amplify their friendship relation. While if parents choose to only study with th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, second, so, thus, while, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54926624738 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19048175934 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452830188679 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.7216023685 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.647058824 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0588235294 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404162641876 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147851969977 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844263275032 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252652742451 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595294904879 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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