TPO 45: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nobody could deny the pivotal role of parents in all stages of their children's lives as they provide their children with love, affection, and convenient. However, nowadays there is a controversial question which is whether in the past people depended more on their parents to make decisions rather than today or not. Personally, I do believe that nowadays people are more independent than before and mainly rely on themselves to make decisions for their life. There are some apparent reasons which support my claim. In the following paragraphs, I will substantiate my viewpoint through two main reasons.
Regarding this issue, the most prominent point to be mentioned is that comparing the past, nowadays our society, family, and living condition have dramatically changed and it is one of the strong proofs about my assertion. Today, parents are occupied with more tasks than before in order to provide convenience and facilities for their children. Hence, they have limited time to spend with their children and consequently do not know enough about their children's lives in detail. Therefore children can not rely on their parents in making decisions. They have learned from their early ages how to deal with their problems and make a wise decision. However, there are exceptions in some situations. For instance, in some cases like choosing a job young people somewhat depend on their parents as they are a valuable treasure of experience and can share their knowledge with their children and help them to make a rational decision.
Another equally important point coming to my mind is the fact that nowadays young people have a higher level of knowledge and deeper insight into some aspects of life in comparison to youngsters in the past years. This is mainly due to extensive sources of information which are easily available for young people. For instance, nowadays the internet is considered as a great source of information and by surfing through the internet you can find lots of articles about whatever you want. Its a privilege for young people that could help them when they are standing between two or more choices. As a personal example, 4 years ago I was not certain about choosing a proper university to continue my graduate study. I was unable to make a decisive decision. But after a meticulous search through the internet and reading different articles about some universities eventually, I made my decision. It actually helped me to make a wise choice without being depended on my parents.
To sum up, by contemplating the previous paragraphs, it definitely reasonable to draw the conclusion that nowadays youngsters are more independent in making their key decisions as today parents do not know about their children in detail and are much busier than before and also young people have access to different sources of information which have made the decision process for them easier.
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... about their childrens lives in detail. Therefore children can not rely on their parents ...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...ts of articles about whatever you want. Its a privilege for young people that could...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, as to, for instance, in some cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09205020921 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70689389477 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485355648536 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.0310711996 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.904761905 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7619047619 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379015505547 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116138760336 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885114189594 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262539362533 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465950625062 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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