Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that Today's parents have a lower force to controlling the decision and life of their children While in the past base on some traditional beliefs parents strongly involved in the personal children decisions. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that today because of parents try to solve all of the problems of their children and helping to them for everything so their children do not learn how to make a decision and live independently, but this idea is not convincing. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that today young people are more able to make decisions about their own lives.
First and foremost, in the past persist to some traditional culture was very important between societies. For example, young people boys or daughters could not be chosen for their wife or husband by own. My grandmother says that when she was a young girl usually parents choose the future husband of their daughters without even asking from them. Even it was possible that whoes that want to the marriage together did not see each other until the marriage ceremony. All of the young people compelled to following these rituals because their parents were very serious about their beliefs and each refusal maybe led to outing the person from family.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that in the past young people for jobs or achieving money mainly were dependent on their family. In the past, most of the young people learning his father skill and continuous their father job. Because societies were not developed at this time same today and the number of jobs was very limited. Therefore, this dependency on the families became impossible each kind of exit from families laws. But, today, most of the young people have an academic education or learned some special skills in educational system. They do not depend on the parents for their job and obtaining money and are able to regulate their life without the help of their parents. Thus they have more freedom than past people.
Finally, yet importantly, in the six last decade, the culture of societies revoluted. It means that through increased in the number of educated people and gain of public knowledge of people, a lot of the number of traditional rituals removed or altered. Several government laws prevent from some unreasonable control and force of parents toward their children and all of the people are aware from their personal right. consequently, all of the alternations led to decrease on parent interference on make decision for children and also, encouraging children to make the decision by themselves to enable them for an independent life.
OPn the basis of reasons that mentioned above I am convinced that today young people have more freedom to take free decision about themselves than it was in the past. Because of the transformation of social culture and beliefs, increased in people knowledge and also, independence of young people from their family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2529.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98816568047 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57567710752 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477317554241 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 789.3 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4478775084 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.428571429 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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